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Adventure of Princess Katara - mr_dedenne

JUDGE: bby_winter09
Grammar: 4 points
Character building: 4 points
Writing style: 4 points
Uniqueness ofthe plot:5 points
Overall Enjoyment: 10 points
Total: 27 points
Feedback: Ang unique nung story tapos nakakatawa iyong ibang scenes. Nakakaenjoy syang basahin. Talagang pinaghirapan.

JUDGE: EurusAthena

Alipin with Benefits - SPBaby

JUDGE: bby_winter09
Grammar: 4 points
Character building: 5 points
Writing style: 4 points
Uniqunees of the plot: 5 points
Overall Enjoyment: 10 points
Total: 28 points
Feedback: Nakakaenjoy basahin ang story na ito. Nakakatawa iyong bida:)iyong tipong kapag nakita mo iyong carbonara at pasta ay maaalala mo sya.

JUDGE: EurusAthena
GRAMMAR
        - May mga pangungusap na hindi nagsisimula sa malaking titik.
        - Capitalize "mama" when it is used in place of a person's name.
    - Kapag gagamit ng dialogue tag (ex: aniya, sabi ko, tanong niya, sigaw ko), laging magsimula sa small letter at kuwit ang gagamitin sa dulo ng dialogue (quoted part).
               EX: "Alis na ako," paalam niya.
   - Kapag gagamit naman ng action tag (description of action that takes place after the dialogue), gumamit ng tuldok sa dulo ng quoted part at sundan ito ng malaking letra.    
                EX: "Alis na ako." Tumayo siya at tumungo sa pinto.
CHARACTER BUILDING
     - Good enough. Doesn't leave that much impression but not that bad either.
WRITING STYLE
     - I suggest you avoid using "hahahhah" on narrations. Ipaubaya mo na saamin ang pagtawa.
     - Noticed some emojis and interjections on your narrations. With your writing style, I guess you could use one or two exclamations on the narration but please refrain from using emojis.
UNIQUENESS OF THE PLOT
       - To be honest, I only read 3 chapters per entry that's why I don't comment much on  the plots. This is one of those novels where after you read the first three chapters, the plot is already kinda predictable. That's why I read more chapters just to see if there's at least a plot twist or something.
OVERALL ENJOYMENT
       - Those above are my comments as a judge, we have to be as formal as possible. As a reader, I'll say that this is wattpad and you can do whatever style you want. I still liked where your story is going.
       - This novel can go places with proper editing :))

JUDGE: AL
G= 3
C. B. = 3
W. S. = 2
U. P. = 3
O. E. = 6
Total of 17
Magandang pagbati.
Here's my Critique, Upercase ang napapansin kong error, may mga salita na hindi naman na dapat i-upercase na maaring gamitan nalamang ng (!). Pero naka depende parin sa iyo kung nais mong sundin ang aking payo. ^_^ pangalawa ay may mga maling pag gamit ng bantas. Marami man akong technical error na napansin ay hinahatak parin ako ng magandang plot para ipag patuloy ang pagbasa. Just improve your writing style ^^ and a friendly advice, masmabuting idaan mo na lamang sa salita ang mga tunog ng bagay. Kagaya ng "Naka rinig ako ng malakas na dagundong" iwasan po natin ang sounds effect.

Angel: In Demon Device - rmarieaclan

JUDGE: bby_winter09
Grammar: 5 points
Character building: 5 points
Writing style: 5 points
Uniqueness of the plot: 5 points
Overall Enjoyment: 10 points
Total: 30 points
Feedback: Ang galing ng pagkakasulat. Talagang detailed sya at madadala ka sa story.

JUDGE: EurusAthena

Chasing The Hybrid - COFFEExJELLY

JUDGE: KylieforniaUSA
Grammar - 4 points
Character Building - 4 points
Writing Style - 4 points
Uniqueness of the Plot - 4.5 points
Overall enjoyment - 6 points
           I don't usually read stories with genre like this. Since under ito ng Filipino Category ay masasabi kong ayos ito para sa akin. Maganda ang pagkakagamit ng mga salita sa story na 'to. Kahit maliliit na detalye ay nailalahad niya ng maayos. Medyo hindi lang ayos sa akin 'yung may nababasa akong iilang pangungusap na purong tagalog tapos biglang magsisingit ng isang english word na translatable naman, like for example: "Chivas mumbled pero inungusan lang siya..." It is advisable to use only one language in one sentence to avoid confusion. Nagmumukha kasing conyo. Halimbawa, purong tagalog lang ang gagamitin mo sa pangungusap na ito, walang halong ingles. But, you can use english words on the NEXT sentence. Intiendes? :D
          Actually, minimal error lang 'yan. But all throughout the story, I like how he/she delivers the story, constructing those tagalog words.
          Next, the character building. Mahusay, dahil kumpletong-kumpleto ang pag-dedetalye niya sa "katauhan" ng mga tauhan ng istoryang ito. Kung paano niya dinescribe ang character, nagtutugma siya base sa nababasa kong "kilos" o "galaw" ng tauhan na iyon.
           Writing style, medyo confusing siya para sa akin. Halo-halo kasi ang flashbacks sa current situation, kahit pa naka-italicized ang flashbacks ay hindi ko maiwasang maguluhan. May iilan pa na puro comma, walang tuldok pagkatapos ng sentence. Sorry. Good thing, nakakasunod pa rin ako sa flow ng story kahit ganoon. 'Yun lang. And since this is an on-going story, hindi ko masasabi kung nagandahan ako o hindi sa pangkalahatan dahil nga hindi pa siya completed. I'm cliffhanged.

JUDGE: EurusAthena

Destined to a Gangster - PinkShadow97

JUDGE: bby_winter09
Grammar- 4 points
Character Building- 5 points
Writing Style- 5 points
Uniqueness of the Plot- 4.5 points
Overall Enjoyment- 10 points
Total: 28.5 points
FEEDBACK: Nakakaenjoy basahin iyong story. Iyong tipong magugulat ka na lang dahil natapos mo na iyong mga chapters. Ang galing ng pagkakabuild up ng mga characters at umpisa pa lang ng story ay makukuha talaga ang atensyon mo. Love it!

JUDGE: EurusAthena

He's A Brutal Demon (Book 2) - dark_queen18

JUDGE: anonymous 
Grammar: 3
Character building: 1
Writing style: 1
Plot: 2
Overall: 4
Total: 11
           The title itself is quiet disturbing. Yes, he is a demon so there's no need to say na brutal siya. When we say demon, expected na brutal, heartless, an evil one.
           Your prologue is not a prologue at all. Book two na 'to so i was expecting that your prologue would be connected sa book one ng kwento. Let's bear in mind na hindi lahat ng kwento, kailangan ng prologue. Don't put a prologue in your story if you can't give justice to that. What you did is some kind of a blurb, i think. Technically speaking, your story needs a major editing process.
           Hiningal ako sa pagbabasa dahil may mga pangungusap na sobrang haba—walang kuwit para tumigil pansamantala upang makahinga naman ang mambabasa. Learn how to use these things: action and dialogue tags, proper punctuation marks, and difference between nang and ng. To think your book 1 is a success, you should put more effort on this one. I believe you can do more; think out of the box.
           You have a potential kung gugustuhin mong mag-step up sa mga nakasanayan nang story sa wattpad. Walang problema kung gasgas ang plot o ang title; kung gagawin mong maganda ang flow, hindi cliché ang characters, gagandahan ang writing style, mas aangat pa 'to. Choose one POV for the whole story, give your character a unique personality, be creative, don't spoonfeed your readers, and learn the proper way of writing. There's always a room for improvement.

JUDGE: EurusAthena

The Queen of Underworld  - IdiosyncraticZero

JUDGE: anonymous 
Queen of the Underworld
Grammar: 3
Character building: 3
Writing style: 1
Plot: 3
Overall: 6
Total: 16
      Honestly, the first part of your prologue is not a prologue at all. Akala ko bloopers. Pero nabigyan mo naman ng justice ang "prologue" nang inilahad mo na ang history ng buong kuwento mo. Maraming loopholes sa bawat chapter. Maybe you just need to proofread your work and be more cautious in giving details, especially when it comes to your characters. I can't say na cold-hearted and heartless si Bellatrix— your main protagonist. What i can see is just a talkative teenager na may attitude problem. Hindi niya napanindigan ang character niya. Unang chapter pa lang, sablay na. I suggest you should do some personality research about your characters. Strive harder!

JUDGE: EurusAthena

In Between Worlds - zyronzester

JUDGE: anonymous
Grammar: 4
Character Building: 5
Writing style: 4
Plot: 3
Overall Enjoyment: 8
Total: 24
Feedback: I'm not into stories na may ganitong plot. But as writer, i commend you for writing this one. A typical real-life story na iniiwasan ng iba na mapag-usapan, bigyan ng importansya. Others may say, your story doesn't have any thrill to attract young readers, but for me, there's something in it that is more important than a unique plot twist: your soul as a writer. When it comes to technical aspect, i think you just need to proofread your work and edit some minor loopholes. Examples: iba't ibang instead of iba't-ibang. Mayamaya instead of maya-maya (isang uri ng ibon ang maya-maya.) Sa first 2 chapters, magaling ang pagkasusulat ng 3rd POV, pero nag-iba yata ang ihip ng hangin sa mga sumunod na. Nasa 3rd POV pa rin naman; ang kaso, kung babasahin na, tunog 1st POV. Naging 1st POV though ang format is 3rd POV. Nagkaroon na kasi ng alter voice ang narrator. May mga kwentong may ganyan ang format, but not to the point na malilito ang iba kung ano ba ang point of view na ginamit? Consistency is the key to that. Hindi nagtatanong ang narrator sa mga reader kung bakit niya ikinukuwento ang isang tagpo o bagay. Pauso lang 'yan ng iba. Lol. So, that's it! Start learning new things to improve yourself. Your writing voice is already there, you just need to know how to use it properly. Kampai!

JUDGE: AL
G = 3
C. B. = 2
W. S. = 2
U. P. = 4
O. E. = 6
Total of 17
"Magandang pagbati"
Point of View. 'yan ang napansin kong medyo magulo sa "IBW" may pagkakataong hindi ko alam kung sino ba ang nasa sitwasyon na iyon. But in Over all your Plot is slightly different with other.

JUDGE: EurusAthena

Together Until the End - SilverGrace643

JUDGE: anonymous
Grammar: 2
Character Building: 2
Writing style: 1
Plot: 2
Overall Enjoyment: 4
Total: 11
      Prologue- The content of your prologue is not actually a prologue but more of a blurb. Prologue is actually a part of the whole story and not just a simple description. It is essential as the other chapters. I think your story doesn't need a prologue at all, okay na 'yong gano'n.
            Plot- The idea was there. May patutunguhan naman but masyadong jumpy lang.
     Technical aspect- It's okay to write your heart out. But be mindful na meron tayong standard sa pagsusulat... sa pagbuo ng kwento. Marami nang reads ang storya mo, so i suggest, magsimula ka nang mag-aral kung paano magsulat nang tama. Tamang gamit ng mga salita, spelling, format sa pagsusulat, atbp. Sa umpisa, okay lang na wala kang alam, lahat naman natutunan. Be eager to explore the colorful world of writing. There should be a balance of show and tell in your story. It's okay to write to express, but don't forget to put an extra effort to impress others.

JUDGE: EurusAthena

Just tell me you love me - TONIUEHARA

JUDGE: anonymous
Grammar: 3
Character building: 4
Writing style: 3
Plot: 4
Overall: 6
Total: 20
Comments: It was good enough for me to stay up all night. It's not perfect, though i think the writer knows how to put a kilig factor gradually in every chapter. Isa 'yon sa strength na kailangang panatiliin. Medyo jumpy ang mga scene and mahirap intindihin 'yong ibang eksena pero madadaan naman 'yon sa proofreading. Kitang-kita 'yong struggle ng writer para magbigay ng magandang kwento kahit na cliché ang naisip niyang plot. I remember reading a scene na naubos niya ang isang paper plate na may lamang pagkain in one minute. That's unbelievable given the fact na paborito niya 'yon at nag-e-enjoy siya sa pagkain. Just be more realistic though fiction ang ginagawa mo. When it comes sa technical aspect, kailangan lang ng writer na matuto kung paano gumamit ng tamang salita, punctation marks, etc. Especially the difference between nang and ng. Sulat lang nang sulat; at basa lang nang basa ng magagandang libro! Kampai!

JUDGE: EurusAthena

Karen Deryahan - Unknown_Writter03

JUDGE: bby_winter09
Grammar-5 points
Character Building-5 points
Writing style- 5 points
Uniqueness of the plot- 5 points
Overall Enjoyment- 10 points
Total: 30 points
Feedback: Umpisa pa lang ay nakakatakot na pero ito iyong story na nakakatakot pero tuloy pa rin sa pagbabasa kasi ang ganda kahit na nakakatakot.

JUDGE: rainexcyth
-choice of word, sa sentence na gagawin mo ay gumamit dapat ng word/s na mag cocomplement sa sentence mo,  ung hindi masagwa sa pangungusap.
-may mga typo at wrong grammar ka din (na alam ko din naman na di maiiwasan hehe)
-at medyo di ako satisfy (for me)  slight lang naman haha.  Medyo nag hahanap kase ko nang mas brutal. Yung tipong gumagamit ng chainsaw tapos tinutusok ung mata gamit ang bbq stick hanggang sa madurog,  ung mga ganun ba hahaha. Pero ayos lang naman ang buong story, hindi masyadong ma-typo.

JUDGE: EurusAthena

L: Viscera - Juicesang

JUDGE: bby_winter09
Grammar: 4 points
Character Building: 4 points
Writing style: 5 points
Uniqueness of the plot: 5 points
Overall Enjoyment: 10 points
Total: 28 points
Feedback: Ang ganda ng daloy nung story. Bumagay iyong mga twist nya tapos iyong mga characters, ang laki ng impact sa story. Bravo!

JUDGE: rainexcyth
L:Viscera
-i think (para sakin lang naman)  wag mo nang i-poetic form na nasa gitna ung sa prologue mo 'medyo' masagwa para sakin kase may mga one word na nakagitna.
-medyo irephrase mo yung iba sentence at ibahin mo rin ung ibang word
-may mga sobrang words din na nagpapapangit sa sentence.

JUDGE: EurusAthena

Loving You (Passion Series # 2) - aesthecryptic

JUDGE: rainexcyth
-may mga typo na sumosobra.
-meron ding di nag cocomplement na pwede namang ibang term ang gamitin parang ganito lang yan (maliwanag-sa ilaw/paligid at nakakasilaw -particularly sa araw) o kaya (maitim-kulay at madilim-na may connect sa brightness o liwanag) ganern.  Gets ba?
-at may ibang word na nawawala kaya hindi nabubuo ung thought nung sentence.

JUDGE: EurusAthena

Making Out With My Boyfriend - itsme_mlenders

JUDGE: bby_winter09
Grammar- 3 points
Character Building- 3 points
Writing style- 3 points
Uniqueness of the plot- 3 points
Overall Enjoyment- 8 points
Total: 20 points
Feedback: Maraming may maling spelling at grammar pero okay lang dahil sigurado naman akong mag-iimprove iyon. Medyo nalilito ako sa story at kung minsan ay masyadong mabilis ang pangyayari. I appreciate your work and keep writing.

JUDGE: rainexcyth
-unang una sa lahat ay yung typo. Sa prologue palang ay may typo na.
-pangalawa ay yung spelling.  May mga maling spell ka.  Like 'shang' na dapat ang spell ay siya.  May english ka ring mali ang spell

JUDGE: EurusAthena

Meet the Bitch - SilentMusikera

JUDGE: bby_winter09
Grammar: 4 points
Character buildin:4 points
Writing style: 4 points
Uniquness of the plot: 4 points
Overall enjoyment: 10 points
Total: 26 points
Feedback: Bitch talaga eh!:) Magamit nga iyong ibang lines ng bida sa mga kaaway ko charr...ang ganda basahin nung story. Feel mo talaga iyong kamalditahan nya eh. Overload! Umpisa pa lang teh! Ang taray na:)

JUDGE: rainexcyth
-punctuation mark,  yung iba kase eh wala yung dapat na punctuation na nakalagay.
-may sentence ka rin na may hindi bagay na word na nasa loob ng sentence.
*suggest ko lang eh irephrase mo ung iba mong sentence
-tapos may iba rin na may sumosobrang word kaya medyo nagiging wrong grammar.

JUDGE: EurusAthena

Miss Hugutera Gone Bad - IcePotter

JUDGE: anonymous
Grammar: 4
Character building: 3
Writing style: 3
Plot: 3
Overall: 6
Total: 19
Comments: This story has a big potential. Aside from technicalities, maybe kailangan lang ng author nalaman kung anong scenes ang dapat i-omit or hindi dapat laktawan. May pagkakataon na maganda na ang pag-build up ng eksena ngunit mapuputol na lang bigla dahil sa mga pagbabago ng sumunod na eksena. Keep on improving! Smile!

JUDGE: EurusAthena

Secrets Covered by Lies - mi_michiah

JUDGE: anonymous
Grammar: 3
Character building: 4
Writing style: 4
Plot: 2
Overall: 6
Total: 19
Comments: the title doesn't give an impact on me. Kahit na may twist ang buong kwento, lumalabas pa rin ang pagiging cliché nito na madalas nagpapaumay na sa mga reader na nakabasa na ng ganitong storyline. One more thing, though this is a work of fiction, you should remember not to compromise even the smallest detail, lalo na this is not a fantasy-based story. Dapat realistic pa rin ang approach, and having a big-time gang sa mismong loob ng campus na parang normal lang na nangyayari sa isang eskwelahan at to think na may mga bihag sila ay malayo sa reyalidad. Let's try to be creative yet realistic. Pero gusto kong magpasalamat dahil unang paragraph pa lang ay napahanga mo na ako. Your writing style is commendable. Hindi na ako magugulat kung isa sa mga araw na ito, malayo ang iaangat ng mga akda mo. They are unique in some way. Kampai!

JUDGE: AL
G = 3
C. B. = 3
W. S. = 3
U. P. = 3
O. E. = 6
Total of 18
"Magandang pagbati"
The Spacing, pansin ko lang na may mga times na nag didikit na ang words. paki check nalang po ^_^ i can't say anything about your plot it's interesting ^_^ keep it up.

JUDGE: EurusAthena
GRAMMAR
       - One of the entries with decent use of grammar and punctuations! Only thing that I found is the incorrect use of roon/doon.
      - Raw/riyan/rito/roon ay ginagamit kung ang huling letra ng sinundang salita ay patinig (vowel). Daw/diyan/dito/doon naman ay ginagamit kung ang huling letra ng sinundang salita ay katinig (consonant).
UNIQUENESS OF THE PLOT
         - The plot is a little bit cliche but there are some plot twists added to it.
CHARACTER BUILDING
         - Characters have distinct characteristics. 
WRITING STYLE
          - I like how you added a little bit of a humor in the dialogues. Hindi naging cheesy yung seryosong plot kahit patawa yung supporting character (Andrei). Also, THANKS for not using "hahahha" just to suggest that it is "funny". I read like 6+ entries like that in this category so It's pretty much traumatic.
          - Multiple POV switches is a little bit distracting for me :c Tho I think I read it somewhere that you wrote this story a long time ago and you kinda regret writing it that way? No? I wrote my own story in cringey multiple POVs as well and I wish I had written it in 3rd person
OVERALL ENJOYMENT
          - One of my decent reads! I will definitely continue reading this after the  competition

Sleight of magic - justshamm

JUDGE: CrazzzyLEE
Grammar = 4
Character Building = 3
Writing Style = 4
Uniqueness of the plot = 3
Overall enjoyment = 6
Total of 20 Pts.
Magandang pagbati.
Just a piece of advise; iwas lang po sa paulit ulit na pagde-detalye ng isang bagay. Kagaya na lamang sa lugar na kinalakihan ni Harper, ilang beses akong nakabasa ng pagde-detalye sa lugar na 'yon sa loob lamang ng isang chapter.
Pag dating naman sa tinatawag nilang 'Technical errors' ay nakakatuwang wala ako masyadong napansin na pagkakamali maski sa pag gamit ng Bantas.
"Just add a little spice on your plot" but Overall Your story is Good enough

JUDGE: EurusAthena

The Badboy and The Feeler - Kuya_Nash

JUDGE: AL
G = 3
C.B. = 1
W. S. = 2
U. P. = 2.5
O. E. = 6
Magandang Pagbati.
Mayroon akong tatlong bagay na napuna at sana tangapin mo ito in a positive way.
• Grammatical Errors- Hindi man ito ganoon karami sa iyong akda ay kapansin pansin parin.
• Bantas- medyo marami ang napansin kong mali sa pag gamit ng mga bantas. Especially sa 'spacing' ng bantas.
• Character Building- Inaamin ko na halos/karamihan sa mga tauhan mo ay pare-pareho ng pagkatao (Personality).
Just a piece of advice; Linawin mo o mag bigay ka ng isang katangian na sa tinutukoy na tauhan lamang makikita.
But still i believe you dahil meron kang Plot na kayang ipag malaki. Errors lang ito na madali pang maayos kaya... Fighting! ^_^ and Overall, your story is Good enough.

JUDGE: EurusAthena

The Blood Weaver - awesomeshibainu

JUDGE: AL
G= 3
C. B. = 3
W. S. = 3
U. P. = 4
Q. E.= 6
Magandang pagbati
Nais ko lamang ipa-alam na ang storyang ito ay mayroong banghay na kakaiba, subalit kapansin pansin ang haba ng Paragraph at iba pang technical errors. But don't worry ang errors na nakikita ko ay tiyak na madaling masulusyona. Keep it up ^_^

JUDGE: EurusAthena

The Chosen One - peculiarnikowl

JUDGE: bby_winter09
Grammar: 5 points
Character building: 4 points
Writing style: 5 points
Uniqueness of the plot: 5 points
Overall Enjoyment: 10 points
Total: 29 points
Feedback:
The story is well-narated and well-planned. The effort of the author is present.

JUDGE: EurusAthena

The Forbidden Kiss - pixietrapper

JUDGE: bby_winter09
Grammar: 5 points
Character building: 5 points
Writing style: 5 points
Uniqueness of the plot: 5 points
Overall Enjoyment: 10 points
Total: 30 points
Feedback: The story is amazing! Ang ganda ganda nya! Ang galing magsulat ng author. Talagang well-detailed sya tapos ang ganda ng twist.

JUDGE: EurusAthena
Grammar: 3
Uniqueness of the Plot: 4
Character Building: 3
Writing Style: 5
Overall Enjoyment: 6.5
GRAMMAR
- Watch out for mixed up past and present tense in one sentence.
Exhibit A: "That'll never happened." (from chapter 1 of your book)
- May mga awkward tag-lish sentences.
- Medyo malabo ang narration sa ibang part.
Exhibit B: "For a moment, my mind got blanked, na nakatitig lang ako sa harap." You probably meant "my mind went blank"? Kapag nag aalangan, gawin nalang tagalog.
UNIQUENESS OF THE PLOT
- The plot itself is cliche if you really think about it. Although the author added twists which made it more interesting.
CHARACTER BUILDING
- Good enough. Doesn't leave that much impression but not that bad either.
WRITING STYLE
- Flow of the story is pretty nice. Maayos at hindi pilit ang mysteries and revelations ng story. Awkward use of tag-lish on some parts is the only thing that drives me away.

The Ghost's Angel - joaneverth

JUDGE: bby_winter09
Grammar: 5 points
Character building: 4 points
Writing style: 5 points
Uniqueness of the plot: 5 points
Overall Enjoyment: 10 points
Total: 29 points
Sayang at short story pala sya. First time to read a short story and naimpress ako sa plot ng story. Buti na lang at naging tao si Cheonsa.

JUDGE: EurusAthena
GRAMMAR
- Hinay hinay lang sa pag-gamit ng "nang". Second sentence, may incorrect use of ng/nang agad.
Nang is basically the equivalent of 'when' or 'so that'. Also denotes an adverb or adverbial phrase. Ng is just the equivalent of 'of'
- Kapag gagamit ng dialogue tag laging magsimula sa maliit na titik at kuwit ang gagamitin sa dulo ng dialogue.
EX: "'Nay, ako na po ang magluluto ng almusal," sabi ko sakanya.
- Kapag gagamit naman ng action tag (description of action that takes place after the dialogue), gumamit ng tuldok sa dulo ng quoted part at sundan ito ng malaking letra.
EX: "'Nay, ako na po ang magluluto ng almusal." Tumayo ako at tumungo sa kusina.
UNIQUENESS OF THE PLOT
- Follows the same storyline as others.
CHARACTER BUILDING
- I see no distinct characterization between the two main characters.
WRITING STYLE
- You are using too many interjections. I think it is better if you will just expound the mc's feelings with real descriptions instead of just typing Korean interjections like "aish!" and the likes.

The Sword Keeper - XtremeWriter

JUDGE: EurusAthena

The One - aehrxx

JUDGE: bby_winter09
Grammar: 3 points
Character Building: 4 points
Writing style: 4 points
Uniqueness of the plot: 3 points
Overall enjoyment: 10 points
Total: 27 points
Feedback: Ang sweet nung napangasawa ni Raeko. Maagaw nga, charr:). Ito iyong story na hindi lang puro love but also about friendship.

JUDGE: anonymous
Grammar: 2
Character building: 2
Writing style: 3
Plot: 3
Overall enjoyment: 6
Total: 16
Comments: Aside from the author needs to learn the technical aspects of writing a story or a novel, i guess the author really needs to widen his/her imagination more. Kailangan niyang matutunang mahalin ang mundo ng pagsusulat. Maraming flashback, maraming eksena na sa tingin ko ay wala namang significant at nagpapahaba lang sa kuwento, papalit-palit ang POV na madalas nakalilito na, at jumpy ang ibang eksena. It would be better siguro kung ire-revise 'to. But i can't hide the fact na may mga chapter na okay ang flow ng kwento at walang problema. Good point din yung medyo naging aware ang author kung paano mag-isip ang mga matatanda at bata na naipakita naman sa mga POV. One more thing, learn how to write consistently. Kampai! Keep on improving!

JUDGE: EurusAthena

In Love With an Unknown Guy - Little_Lovely_Girl

JUDGE: anonymous
Grammar: 3
Character building: 1
Writing style: 1
Plot: 2
Overall enjoyment: 6
Total: 13
Comments: In my own opinion, the author needs to know why she's/he's writing a story (esp. why she wrote this particular story). I scanned her other stories just to get some little background about the author. Nalaman ko na gano'n talaga ang way at style niya sa pagsusulat. Mahirap kung iisahin ko pa ang mga bagay na dapat i-improve or ang dapat punain sa kwento. Ang payo ko, look for other great stories and learn how they build their characters, how they write a scene, and how they narrate. Love the idea of writing enough for you to strive harder to be a better writer/author. Maraming room for improvement.  Kamapai!
Ps. Ang scores na ibinigay ko ay based lahat sa kwento na mismong ipinasa ng author as an entry here. Walang kinalaman 'yon sa kung ibang stories niya. I hope na-clarify ko 'yon. Thank you.

JUDGE: EurusAthena

Promises - beyyaaa_lee

JUDGE: anonymous
Grammar: 3
Character building: 3
Writing style: 3
Plot: 2.5
Overall enjoyment: 6
Total: 17.5
Comments: The author states in the beginning of the story that she/he's a newbie at writing, but somehow, i noticed that the author knows the difference between show and tell. That's impressive. The entire story wasn't new to me. I can easily tell what will gonna happen next. Kaya siguro ang isang challenge sa author ay kung paano lagyan ng twist ang kwento. Use also an outline as a guide para di ka mawala plot. And one more thing: you don't need to use bold letters/capslock on dialogues that you want to put an emphasis. Especially when a character is shouting, exaggerating, or what. Use a proper punctuation mark. And put some narration that would describe their emotions or actions. I know you can do better. Kampai! Keep on learning!

JUDGE: EurusAthena
Grammar: 3
Uniqueness of the Plot: 3
Character Building: 3
Writing Style: 3
Overall Enjoyment: 6
GRAMMAR
         - Gumamit ng kudlit (') kapag may titik na kinakaltas. Ex: sa'yo, sa'kin
         - May mga umpisa ng pangungusap na hindi nagsisimula sa capital letter. I also suggest that you refrain from using ALL CAPS just to emphasize some superb and intense happenings. It is way better if you will just describe them further instead of just plainly typing them in CAPSLOCK form.   
          - Use of raw/riyan/rito and daw/diyan/dito. Raw/riyan/rito ay ginagamit kung ang huling letra ng sinundang salita ay patinig (vowel). Daw/diyan/dito naman ay ginagamit kung ang huling letra ng sinundang salita ay katinig (consonant).
UNIQUENESS OF THE PLOT
         It is preferable that you add more unpredictable happenings to make your book a page turner even if the plot is not so unique.
CHARACTER BUILDING
         Good enough. Doesn't leave that much impression but not that bad either.
WRITING STYLE.  
        Please refrain from using "=_=" emoji and too much "HAHAHAHAHAHA". It might seem boring to you but it is better to express the mc's feelings in real words and descriptions.
         Chapters are a little bit shorter compared to the typical wattpad novels. I feel like there are no real happenings on each chapter... and if there's a happening, it is executed too quickly. There's no time to build up the mood and stuff as everything.happens.too.quickly.
          I suggest make the chapters longer. You can actually squeeze in the 1'st - 3'rd chapter as one solid chapter that makes sense. Don't be afraid to expound the mc's feelings. Add more plot twists and don't hesitate to introduce some supporting characters later on to make your story longer lol.
OVERALL ENJOYMENT:
          Good Enough!