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Book: An Exquisite Empress

Author: itsryselle

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Title (4/5): Fits well with the story and catches the attention of readers. I feel like it could be made more specific to the story but it's not a bad title.

Cover (5/5): LOVE the cover! Did you make it yourself? It's clear from your descriptions that this is Carmen and the colors really stand out and catch my eye. I'm absolutely entranced by it and it definitely made me want to learn more!

Summary (10/10): Does a good job of explaining the story without giving too much away and is a good length.

Plot (12/15): I don't normally read romance-driven stories but this one definitely kept my interest! The pacing seems good for the story and the plot flows well. The flashbacks to Carmen's previous life are well-placed and I think you do a good job of slowly developing the relationship between Carmen and Javier. If anything, you could maybe expand more on Javier's fallen kingdom and his past, but perhaps more of that will be revealed later. I also wasn't immediately sure where the plot was going aside from the possible romantic relationship between Carmen and Javier, but chapters nine and ten really helped to give the plot direction with the addition of Ezekiel assaulting Carmen, Carmen asserting her authority over Martha, and Martha's secret information about Carmen. My biggest recommendation is to add more description. Your story is quite dialogue-heavy, and I think it would help to bulk up the chapters and immerse readers more in your world if you included more descriptions about the characters and the settings. I think the settings could especially use more description, because it seems like you've created a beautiful world for your story but much is left to the imagination. You've got great descriptive skills from what I can tell so far, so don't be scared to flaunt them more!

Characters (9/10): The characters are distinct and the relationships between them are immediately made clear. I especially like Carmen because she has a kind heart but she's not afraid to stand up for herself. I think she's a very strong and relatable character and her relationships with the other characters help to solidify her characterization, especially with Ezekiel and Martha. The dialogue seems to flow fairly well and the perspectives are clear, however I kind of struggled when reading the parts from Martha's perspective because they're very different from the other perspectives (ex: the style of your writing seems to change and you use more curse words when writing in Martha's perspective). This may be more of a personal opinion, however.

Organization (2/5): The table of contents is easy to navigate and the pages are clean and easy to read. I noticed a few spelling/grammar errors, but overall it seems like you were pretty thorough. The biggest thing I noticed is that most of the dialogue is missing ending punctuation. I'd also recommend adding more dialogue tags because there were several points where I became confused about who was speaking. There also seemed to be a few points where you separated dialogue that was said by the same speaker into different lines which also made it a little difficult to follow along with as well.

Overall (42/50): You've got a really solid start to your story and I'm excited to see where it goes! Your characters are really strong and I especially found myself relating to Carmen. I definitely think she's someone that more people should aspire to be like! My biggest recommendations are to add more descriptions for your characters and settings, to fix the issue with the missing punctuation at the end of dialogue, and to add more dialogue tags and combine dialogue from the same speaker into one line. Otherwise, great job, and keep up the good work!

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