Uh oh, historical fiction. Never really liked it much.

Cover Judge: Wow! A generic image with some text smashed on top! Much amaze!

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You can get yourself a better cover. But AFTER you fix up the book a lot.

Blurb Judge: Very cliche and unoriginal setup. Ally doesn't want to be a princess she wants to explore the world and find true love! Bla bla...

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I can tell.

If I zoom out, this is what the chapter looks like:

It's literally a wall of words! You gotta make space and separate paragraphs or it'll be a long, continuous barrage of text.

Okay, there are lots of grammatical errors, bad syntax and word repetition.

There's too much for me to individually correct, but I suggest you either a) get yourself an editor who can go through your writing and fix things up, or b) pay much more attention to structure and wording for future writing.

But you need to seriously revise all the chapters.

Structure wise:

-Create a new line before dialogue

-Capitalize after full stop

-There are random apostrophes and commas in the wrong places

-Conflicting verb tenses (past/present tense in two different sentences)

-and all that I've mentioned before

Content wise:

-The narrating is flat. You have to give your character a voice; is she rebellious or just annoyed? What does she notice first when she enters a room? How does she think? Readers should be able to grasp her personality and attitude just by reading the main character's thought process.

-Show, don't tell. Another crucial thing beginners tend to forget. Don't tell us exactly what's going on. Books aren't made of long, detailed, perfect descriptions; they're meant to transmit emotions, suspense, plot twists, things that would make a reader want to read more.

Summary: You got a lot to work on.