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Hosted by MiaKurenai_2009

"Angel of Music"

Judged by axelle_grace14

Finished in 1st place out of 10 competitors.

Scoring and Review by axelle_grace14:

Elements: (9/10)

Creativity: (9/10)

Appeal: (4/4)

Relevance: (5/5)

     I really enjoyed how the prologue of your book gave a taster of the evolution of the love triangle or should I say square between the main character and three side characters. You have described beautifully the bond between Christine, the main character, and the suitors that each strive to gain her love. I usually recommend making prologue shorter than regular chapters because that way it is easier to maintain the reader's attention.

     However, even though yours is relatively long, your poetic way of writing keeps the readers engaged until the end. The only thing that I would recommend improving is the verb tenses. You often go back and forth between present tense and past tense which can be quite confusing.

Total Score: (28/30)

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