🔪》Title, Cover, & Blurb

The title is capitalized correctly and it fits the story. The cover definitely fits the story, it reminds me of the posters for the Star Wars movies. The text on the cover is a little hard to read. This might just be because of Wattpad, but the cover looks fuzzy. The blurb doesn't tell the readers much about the characters and the story, it's just a short excerpt from the story. The excerpt does draw readers in, however, the blurb should introduce what the story is going to be about and who the characters are.

🔪》Plot

The plot of the story is clear and it draws readers in. Ayen is an interesting character and I'm interested in seeing where her story goes. The exposition introduces the characters and the world well. I enjoyed all the details you included from Star Wars throughout the story. Even though things were changed and different on DS-1, it still felt like Star Wars and everything fit in well. The story is also progressing at a nice pace.

🔪》Characters

The characters are introduced and described very well. Their personalities are also shown very well throughout the chapters. Vader is portrayed well throughout the chapters. Ayen has a very fiery personality and I love it! I love the little comments she makes about things lol. It's clear Ayen, Mac, Zev, and Ceru care about one another. I enjoyed seeing them interacting in the mess hall and I'd definitely like to see more of them working together. I absolutely loved the jokes Mac and Zev told while they were in the mess hall. I especially liked the one Zev told about Vader lol.

🔪》Grammar/Spelling

There were a few spelling errors in the chapter, but nothing major. I didn't notice any grammar errors.

🔪》Writing Style

The writing style was done well and consistent throughout the chapters, however, it could use a little improvement. The phrasing for some of the sentences was a little hard to understand. The image in the middle of the chapters are very pretty, however, they do interrupt the flow of the story a bit. You do a good job working information and descriptions into the story. The descriptions are also very well done, it's easy to picture what you're describing. Some more descriptions of the scenery could be added though.

🔪》Enjoyment

The story was definitely enjoyable and I would read on! I like Ayen and I want to see where the story goes. I'm also interested in seeing how the relationship between Vader and Ayen develops. I also want to see more of the hangar boys lol! Also, the hangar boy I'd like to work with is Mac.

🔪》Overall

Overall, the story is intriguing and the story is well done! The plot draws readers in and makes them want to keep reading. The characters are also interesting and enjoyable. As mentioned, I love Ayen and the hangar boys! The descriptions are done very well although more descriptions of the scenery could be included. The story was very enjoyable and I definitely want to read on to see where it goes. Good luck with your story!