🔪》Title, Cover, & Blurb

The title fits the story, is appealing, and is capitalized correctly. The cover fits the story and is cool, however, it's a little hard to see the elements. I suggest making the picture a little bigger and the text bigger. Maybe also move the text down a bit so there isn't as much empty space at the bottom of the cover. The blurb introduces the character and the plot of the story well. It also draws readers in and makes them want to read the story.

🔪》Plot

The plot of the story was interesting and it draws readers in. The plot didn't feel rushed, it progressed at a nice pace, which can be hard to do with a short story. The exposition introduces the characters in the story well. I do wish there was some more background information on the characters though. Some of the background information felt like it was just brushed over, like all the things Victoria has done. The exposition needs to introduce the world better. I didn't realize it took place in America until Victoria mentioned she lived in Alaska in chapter five.

🔪》Characters

The characters are introduced well, however, they could be described more. The characters' appearances need to be described in the story. The characters' aren't described that much, and some not at all, so the readers don't really know what they look like. The characters personalities are shown well throughout the chapters. You also do an excellent job showing Victoria's mental state and how it changes throughout the story.

🔪》Grammar/Spelling

There were a few spelling and grammar errors throughout the chapters. Scream should be italicized since it's a movie. The songs, "Halley's Comet," "My Future," and "Everything I Wanted," should be in quotes.

🔪》Writing Style

The writing style is good, however, it could use some work. More descriptions need to be added into the story. Not just more descriptions of the characters' appearances, but descriptions of the scenery as well. Make sure you're showing the readers what's happening instead of telling them. Quite a few parts of the story came across as telling rather than showing. The writing style felt chaotic, however, that works really well with the story. It shows Victoria's thoughts and mental state very well!

🔪》Enjoyment

I did end up reading the whole story since it was only eight chapters. The story was enjoyable and it kept me hooked! Victoria is an interesting character and I'd like to learn more about her. I know this book was for the 8 Chapter Challenge, but I'd love to see a longer and expanded version of the story.

🔪》Overall

Overall, the plot and characters were interesting and the story was enjoyable! More information about the world and the characters could be added though. As well as more descriptions of the characters' appearances and the scenery could be added. The writing style does an excellent job showing Victoria's personality and her mental state throughout the story. Make sure you're showing the readers what's happening instead of telling them. The story also needs an edit to fix the spelling and grammar errors. The plot draws the readers in and keeps them hooked. Victoria is also an interesting character and I'd like to learn more about her. Good luck with your story!