🔪》Title, Cover, & Blurb

The title is capitalized correctly and it fits the story. The cover is very pretty and it definitely attracts readers to the story! The art is beautiful! I like the font used for the title, however, the title could be a little bigger. I liked the longer blurb better than the shorter one. It introduced the story and characters better and draws readers in. Both aren't needed in the story description.

🔪》Plot

The plot of the story isn't very clear, it's hard to understand, and the plot seems to be progressing slowly. Anthony seems older like he should be in college, but in the story it seems like he's still in high school. If he's still in high school, why does he live alone? Why does everyone make fun of Anthony and hate him? Why was everyone trying to kill Aegir when he was a kitten? The exposition needs to introduce the characters and the world. Magic is possible in this world, but that part of the world isn't explained to the readers.

🔪》Characters

The characters are described well, however, they need to be introduced better. There are a lot of questions I have about the characters and not much information about them is given to the readers. The characters personalities are shown in the chapters, however, the characters need to be developed more as they seem one-dimensional. Anthony is bullied and wants to write, Aegir is rude, and the aunt and Mr. So are cruel. Show other sides of their personalities. Some of the characters' actions and dialogue aren't realistic. For example, everything Mr. So said about Anthony's writing. Also, the aunt slapping him when she showed up at his apartment.

🔪》Grammar/Spelling

There were spelling and grammar errors in the story. There shouldn't be a space between a quotation mark and the dialogue. Make sure you're consistent with the tense you're using. You switch between past and present tense quite a bit.

🔪》Writing Style

The writing style is consistent throughout the chapters, however, it needs work. Show the readers what's happening in the story instead of telling them. Show the characters' emotions and actions with descriptions. The phrasing was also hard to understand. Make sure the phrasing you use is easy for the readers to understand. The descriptions of the characters were well done and worked into the story well.

🔪》Enjoyment

The blurb drew me in and made me want to read the story, however, I don't think I would read on. It was hard to understand what was happening in the story and the story didn't keep me hooked. I did like that the chapters were numbered as "First Meow" and so on. That's so cute!

🔪》Overall

Overall, the story needs to be developed more. The plot outlined in the blurb sounds interesting and draws readers in. In the story, the plot isn't very clear and it's progressing slowly. Make sure the plot is clear so the readers understand what's happening and where the story could be heading. The characters also need to be developed more. Be sure to show more sides of their personalities in the story and keep their dialogue and actions realistic. Show the readers what's happening in the story instead of telling the readers. The story also needs an edit to fix the spelling and grammar errors as well as the phrasing that's hard to understand. Good luck with your story!