🍓Dive into 'Sperm: On Demand' for a unique and intriguing story that blends rich vocabulary with amazing characters. With its creative plot, this book really promises a captivating read from start to finish!🍓

🍓Title : 5/5

•The title 'Sperm: On Demand' is quite intriguing and immediately piqued my interest! It's catchy and has all the potential to draw readers in with just a glance.
•It perfectly matches the plot and I honestly can't think of any criticisms because in my opinion, it made me want to start reading the book as soon as I got my free time.
•And it is quite bold, unique and promises an exciting read.
•Kudos to the author for choosing such an attention grabbing title!✨⭐

🍓Cover : 3/5

•The cover is good, featuring one of our main characters, Kim Taehyung, with a strong and captivating look.
•However, I believe the cover could be enhanced to match the well-structured plot and the overall quality of this well-written book.
•Currently, only the title is easily noticeable while some lines under the title are difficult to read even when viewing from my computer.
•Although these lines are clear in the cover available in the author's note chapter, they should be readable when we first see it from the cover of the book, right?
•Also, the phrase, "The amount of sperm he wasted, he could have made a whole new country," is quite catchy and deserves more prominence on the cover. Maximizing the font size for this phrase would really make it stand out.
•Additionally, the author's name at the bottom of the cover is hard to read and the phrases below it are almost invisible. Even when I zoom in, they remain unreadable. But as I said, they can be seen well in the author's note.
•So considering the book's amazing plot, a thorough editing of the cover or even a new cover would be beneficial.
•The editor who made the cover has done a great job but improving the visibility of all the phrases, the author's name and making the cover more intriguing would be fantastic.
•The cold look of Taehyung in the cover is really good and this picture of him is well-chosen because it gives off an intimidating yet dominant vibe.
•However, I feel like the other main character, Erin, also deserves a spot on the cover.
•Including Erin would add more depth, making it even more engaging.
•Overall, I think a little more effort in enhancing the cover would perfectly complement this great book!✨

🍓Blurb : 3.8/5

•The blurb is good and subtly talks about our two main characters and their story, but I can't help but notice the unnecessary commas in the lines. Let me show it:

Original blurb:

A story, where an young wildlife photographer, drown in the eyes of a professor, who writes novels on Sundays. Practically, a sperm donor has magnets for the irons in her blood. But what if they both have some secrets concealed with them?

This is the one I edited:

A story where a young wildlife photographer drowns in the eyes of a professor who writes novels on Sundays. Practically, a sperm donor has magnets for the irons in her blood. But what if they both have some secrets concealed within them?

•It is simple but feels like the commas should not be added when there is no need for them, including the ‘an’ used instead of ‘a’ before young and some other mistakes.
•Also, I don't quite understand the line 'A sperm donor has magnets for the iron in her blood.' Does it mean Taehyung has the magnets for the iron in his blood, or does it mean he has the magnets for the iron in Erin's blood? It got me confused and I still can't figure out if the author meant Erin or accidentally wrote 'her' for 'him'. I hope the author could clarify it a bit more.
•Overall, it's still good and intriguing.⭐✨

🍓Character development : 3.9/5

•The characters are well-written, each with their own backstory and unique personality traits.
•I loved the first chapter where the two main characters were introduced so well. It really piqued my interest and made me eager to dive deeper into the book.
•In the subsequent chapters, we got a glimpse into each character's personality, with the main leads becoming more attracted to each other.
•However, I couldn't help but feel that there could have been more descriptive interactions before they got together.
•Also, the main thing for the point deduction is that the introduction of sexual elements in the story felt too rushed. As a reader, I felt that introducing sexual activities too quickly didn't align well with their emotional development.
•In the chapter where they confess their love, adding kisses and pecks is understandable but the sexual elements felt premature and didn't effectively portray their love for each other. It seemed to cheapen the emotions.
•Therefore, I suggest to the author, if you're writing another book in the future or currently working on one, focus more on portraying the emotions of the characters deeply. Allow them to explore themselves and their love more thoroughly after their emotional development.🥰

🍓Plot : 9/10

•The plot is something new to me.
•Lol, it was really intriguing, and I was eagerly awaiting the chapter where I could learn more about Tae and his sperm donation past with Jungkook, and to be honest, each character had their own backstory. It was really interesting.
•The creative idea for the story is really good, and the aesthetic banners in each chapter add a nice touch to the book.
•But the only problem for me was with the pacing of the book in the initial chapters. The chapters before Erin and Taehyung got together seemed a bit slow, and the world-building in some chapters could have been more specific.
•A few of the chapters felt too short, but it didn't significantly affect my overall reading experience.
•In conclusion, the plot is quite unique and really creative. A round of applause for the author!⭐⭐⭐

🍓Grammar/Vocabulary : 7.5/10

•The whole book has rich vocabulary and I truly enjoyed it. It's really well-written.
•Some of the descriptive phrases and paragraphs were like I want to blow a flying kiss to the author for writing them really well, lol. They were really good and interesting to read.
•The explicit parts were also well-written and as someone who always feels cringey and awkward when writing them, I found yours amazing! ✨
•However, regarding grammar, I think the entire book needs thorough editing. As I mentioned in the blurb category, there were too many unnecessary commas that affected the flow of my reading, causing unnecessary pauses in the lines.
•There were also many instances, especially in dialogues, where commas were needed but absent.
•Additionally, some paragraphs had the first letter of the first word cut off, and others had grammatical mistakes.
•As for the issue with "didn't" and "does," I've already mentioned it to you.⭐
•Despite the rich vocabulary, the grammar issues overshadow it. Some readers who read books thoroughly in one sitting might find it a bit difficult.
•Therefore, I suggest the author do a quick and good edit of all her chapters. It would greatly benefit the book.✨⭐✨

🍓Overall Impression : 8/10

•Overall, the story was quite unique and intriguing with a plot that I have never read on this app before.
•It really piqued my curiosity as I read through more and more chapters, and I enjoyed it!!! ⭐
•With good editing of the cover, all chapters, and the grammatical mistakes, the book will be a blast and a great hit for the author.

🍓Final marks : 40.2/50

🍓Last note :

For the improvements you have asked in the expectation question in the form :

I think I've covered a lot about it in the categories above, but I'll tell you again : the book's cover needs editing, along with the blurb, chapters and grammatical mistakes. Also, the pacing of the initial chapters and the emotional development of the characters could be improved.🌸

As for the pointers:

1) Anything that would interest readers from the start:

From a reader's perspective, I believe the first chapter itself is truly intriguing, but if you would like further suggestions, I recommend adding more depth to the characters' emotions. Additionally, using visual images of the characters, like their attire when Taehyung visits Erin's house and Erin dresses beautifully could engage readers more.⭐

2) Where am I lacking :

In my opinion, there's nothing lacking in your ability when you can craft such an interesting plot with rich vocabulary and clear, understandable writing style. The suggestions I've made are simply areas for improvement, not shortcomings. Keep writing with your current flow and consider these enhancements.✨⭐

3) Enjoyability and curiosity in the writing:

For me, your writing is really enjoyable. It's straightforward yet captivating, not overly slow or too cryptic like some other authors' works. I found it highly interesting and was curious about the entire story right from the first chapter!!! 🌸

Reviewer : Yoonkeeri
Author of the book : ihskasii_u

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