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Let's get into it!

☁first impressions (24/25): The cover immediately catches my eye! It's weirdly stylistic, and it's actually very cool even though I wouldn't have thought it would have worked. However, I think you can maybe change the font of "Sons of Bangtan" to make it a bit more professional-looking. Onto the description, I really liked it. It's short and to the point, while also getting its meaning across. I think you could stand to add another sentence or two to it, just to round it out and really give readers an idea of what they're getting into completely! The title is SUPER original, which I love! It sticks to my head and I'm able to recall it fairly easily. This is really great because there's a lot of books with the same exact titles that makes it hard to differentiate them from each other. (unless one is REALLY good and that doesn't happen too often) Great job overall!

☁grammar & sentence structure (13.5/15): I couldn't find any grammar mistakes that were super glaringly obvious, just some misplaced commas and such. You obviously took a lot of care into writing this, and I can see by the way everything is worded and put together. The sentence structure flows very smoothly and there isn't really anything jarring that takes me out of the content, which is great for keeping picky readers like me hooked! One thing I would keep in mind is dialogue. It's not really a character thing and more of a sentence structure thing, so I decided to put it here. You use a lot of exclamation marks and stuff that, in my opinion, break up the text a bit, and I think you can just get away with using commas or periods in those spaces. It just makes me feel like the characters are shouting all the time... that was really the only flaw I saw, and obviously that was super nit picky, so you did amazingly! I would also keep word choice in mind, because some of the words you used are a little awkwardly placed in the sentence.

☁plot (30/30): Though Mafia AU's are a BIT played out, you really made it your own with this story. I love the fact that the other gang in the plot is Japanese and how that's actually relevant to the story and not an abandoned subplot. I think it's super cool how it's like the yakuza and kkangpae, which is kind of a callback to the Korea vs. Japan thing. The foreshadowing with the girl that Yoongi apparently was involved in the death of is done so well, and every time it's brought up, I'm like WTF I GOTTA KNOW MORE! Every character's actions ties directly into the plot, and everything is relevant and tied to everything else, which is the sign of a very well thought-out story. I'm so impressed with how you did that, and I hope others take pointers from you for their Mafia AU's, because in your world, I feel that everything is connected and working together like cogs in a machine, which is, from what I gather, how mafias work in real life. They're not just stand-alone things. They have networks and connections that all tie in to one thing or another, and that's how you portray the mafias in this story. You're the first person I've given a 30/30 for plot for this reason, so congrats.

☁characters (20/20): Um. Yoongi? As? A? Mob? Boss? What the hell are you trying to do? KILL ME? Before I start on a rant about that for 10 pages, I want to say that I really love all of your character development so far. Marcella seems like a really cool chic that doesn't just have that Cool Girl Persona that every book tries to do. She doesn't try to overcompensate. She comes off as a genuine human being, and so does Yoongi. I really loved that scene where he was with Jungkook, Namjoon and Hoseok and was basically wanting to be hit because he felt his own self-loathing. It conveys his character so well, and I'm excited to see his character development from that moment on. Even the opening scene lets us know what kind of man he is without disclosing too much. He's just as complex as you or I, and I think he and every other character behaves very realistically in the situation that they're in. The side characters also serve a purpose and aren't there to just further the main characters' archs. One thing I'd like to point out is that some of the dialogue is a bit unrealistic, and maybe it's because they seem like they're yelling all the time with how many exclamation marks there are. However, I already touched on that before, so I'm not going to deduct points. Overall, amazing job.

☁writing style (20/20): Excuse me. Who told you you could write this well? Like, for real. Who gave you THE RIGHT TO BLOW ME AWAY LIKE THIS??? It's fast paced and adrenaline-filled in all the right places, and flows with the overall pace of the story very well. When it becomes more serious, you linger on the details perfectly to let the readers know what each person is feeling and to let us be in their shoes. Everything from your dialogue to your descriptions are unique in their own way, and I really don't think I've seen anything quite like your writing style. It stands out from the crowd of contemporary literature for sure.

☁flow (9.5/10): It's slow in the right places, fast in the right places, and the chapter lengths are perfect for fleshing out the scene and closing it out to a natural end. The writing style really helped with the flow for sure. Something I'd like to point out, however, are the sentences. I didn't say this on the grammar and sentence structure part since I thought maybe it'd fit a little better hear, but think some sentences can become compound sentences to help with the flow more. It can be jarring to come to full stops every few seconds for a reader, and it's also super easy to make a compound sentence or two out of a paragraph! That's super nit-picky, so I only took off a half point lol. Other than that, you're golden!

☁total score: 117/120 or 97.5%!

Magnifique!

☁optional advice nook: Add a couple more sentences to description, change up the cover if you can, brush up tiny grammar mistakes, and make use of more compound sentences. Other than that, it's perfect.

☁song nook: Here are some songs I thought of while reading this! I searched for songs that sounded dangerous, sexy, cool, but also fast-paced and adrenaline-filled like many of the action sequences in some chapters... basically what I perceived to be the aesthetics of your book! Let me know what you think about them!

♔bury a friend by Billie Eilish♔

♔2 Fast by SuperM♔

♔Ko Ko Bop by EXO♔

♔Used to the Darkness by Des Rocs♔

♔The Wolf by SIAMES♔

☁summary: I'm so sorry this took so long. I was so busy with school and I hope it won't happen again with anyone else. I genuinely enjoyed this story so much, and it was recommended by many people before you submitted it. Your plot development was one of the best I had ever seen on Tsuki or otherwise, the characters were realistic and fleshed-out, the writing style was spot-on for the type of story that it was, and your flow was also amazing. I'm not sure why you filed for this review when your book was so perfect... I honestly just nit-picked some of it and I hope that didn't discourage you, because I honestly wouldn't change 99% of the book.

Aaaand... that's it for the review! Comments, questions, concerns, please let me know. We're finally onto Round 2, folks! The next batch will be posted within a few days.

SEE YOU THERE!