"Ooh, you're taking up a fraction of my mind."

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Let's get into it!

☁first impressions (23.5/25): LOVE THE THEME! The blue is SO cute, and I really feel like it gives such a nice vibe to your whole account. I love the font for Heartless, as well. It's classy and super fitting for the type of story this is. The description is nice and short, but also long enough where the reader can see what the story is going to be about. There isn't a big quote lead-in, which is also really refreshing to see. The only thing I would change is maybe (I know we've talked about this before) changing the title "Heartless" is kind of everywhere on Wattpad, so I would suggest changing that, as well.

☁grammar & sentence structure (13/15): The grammar is great, and there weren't any mistakes except for a few spots, which you could easily fix up in a light copy edit. (misused periods/commas, etc.) The fact that the text has almost no grammar mistakes definitely makes me want to keep reading, because seeing consistent mistakes in a book is actually kind of annoying. Your sentence structure is also varied enough for me to be intrigued the whole way through! It makes me think you know what you're doing, which feels really great as a reader.

☁plot (27/30): The plot has definitely been used before, but you definitely make it unique with your writing style and characters to support it, so it's honestly not even that big of a deal. Because it's such a classic storyline, it also has a lot of room for variation, which you have, with more side characters, better characterization than most of the other books like that in general, etc. To be honest, I definitely got k-drama vibes from this plot, minus the overly-dramatic amnesia-car-crash-murder stuff ;) You succeed in creating an atmosphere of warmth in the storyline (even though Taehyung's cold af) that maybe comes from a place of nostalgia, but also comes from your talent as an author, as well.

☁characters (20/20): I felt like the characters were real people! The fact that you made me hate Taehyung so much while making me love Jihye definitely means you're doing your job as an author! No, seriously. Taehyung is such a jerkwad. He IS pretty hot though... ANYWAY! I feel like I really know them, especially Jihye. I get the feeling that she's pretty vulnerable, yet goes out of her way to be kind to others, because she wants to do unto others what she wants done to her. She can be a little soft-spoken at times, but can stick up for herself when things become dire. I also love all of the supporting cast, and how they don't just hang around while the protagonists do their thing. They're actually a part of the story, which is kind of rare to find in a lot of fanfics. Like, I love Yoongi so much it's not even funny, BOTH in real life and in this story. In my opinion, the characters really make this book what it is.

☁writing style (18.5/20): I was taken by your cute, simplistic writing style from the moment I opened the book! It doesn't feel overly vague, yet it also doesn't get too bloated from the details. It's hard finding a middle ground for authors, and honestly, that middle ground varies for each story. I feel that you really got that for Heartless, which makes me so happy. However, I think you could afford a little more detail in your writing! I don't think this will sacrifice the flow at all, and it'll honestly flesh out everything in the long run. This includes anything from sensory details to more internal feelings that Jihye might feel, or any other character, for that matter. It'll definitely round out the text!

☁flow (10/10): The flow is impeccable! I love how every chapter ends with a light cliffhanger... like, it's a comfortable end, yet I feel myself wanting to read more! The pace is never too fast or too slow, and the chapters are a perfect length. I never feel intimidated opening it, and I find myself always having time to read your chapters right when they're published! This is really great for capturing an audience, because the last thing you want is for your readers to get bored by the story. Great job!

☁total score: 112/120 or 93.3%!

Radical!

☁optional advice nook: If you want, you can change the name to be more plot-specific so that it stands out from the other books on Wattpad. Go over the text for any grammar mistakes that you might have missed during your previous edits, and maybe add a little more detail to the text while you're at it to really flesh out the story!

☁song nook: Here are some songs I thought of while I read this! I really got the feeling that their love is blooming yet reluctant from where the story is going, but I also wanted to reflect some of Taehyung and Jihye's POV in this. It was hard to find stuff specific to this storyline, but I went with the aesthetic/an aspect of the story. Let me know what you think!

♔Bad Liar by Selena Gomez♔

♔Heaven by Julia Michaels♔
(such an iconic song... ironic that it's from the
50 Shades soundtrack and Tae's the rich CEO ;)

♔YOU CAN'T HOLD MY HEART by MONSTA X♔

♔Break My Heart by Dua Lipa♔
(a repeat from another review but it fits
for this, too)

♔KILLING ME by iKON♔

☁summary: YOU KNOW HOW MUCH I LOVE THIS STORY! I tried to be as un-biased as possible, but I can't help that I have such a soft spot for it 🥺 I think this has such a great reach, from people that are more into casual reads (with such a nice chapter length) to people who are devoted to the story. (LIKE ME) The storyline is easily understood by anyone who comes across it, and I think this story is honestly a hidden gem that should be discovered by WAY more people.

PLEASE CHECK THIS BOOK OUT, GUYS! It's honestly SO cute and had me hooked from the beginning. If you like more fluffy, feel-good books with a k-drama vibe to it, this is your go-to! The author is also very VERY nice, (I SAY THIS FROM EXPERIENCE) and your comments/votes won't go unnoticed.

Aaaand... That's it for the review! I hope you guys liked it. Questions, comments, concerns, let me know. I hope everyone is practicing safe distancing and such in these trying times!

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