"Speak in tongues, I don't even recognize your face."

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Queen_of_Tarts
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Let's get into it!

☁first impressions (23.5/25): Can we talk about the cover real quick, 'cause... ITS PERFECT. ALL I SEE IS PERFECTION RIGHT THERE. It encapsulates the mood of the book perfectly with the red moon in the background and the smokey atmosphere, and don't even get me started on how hot Yoongi and Jungkook are. Even the font adds to the aesthetics of it. I wouldn't change a thing. Going onto the title, however, I notice that there are lots of books with that exact name, even in the BTS fanfic world, so I would maybe add something to it to make it more unique. Lastly, the description is really compelling. I remember looking at the quote and being like "whoa I have to read more!" You also warn people heftily that it is a mature book instead of dedicating a whole chapter to it, which is great, since I see a lot of books that don't drag in the beginning. The only thing I would do is put another sentence after your existing synopsis to include AT LEAST Alice (if not Megan as well), since she's technically the MC and the person that we see the most characterization for. It's odd to not see her name mentioned once, so definitely put something about her! Other than that, I'm gonna pretend I haven't read Coven twice already and dive in!

☁grammar & sentence structure (14/15): your grammar is very good, and I barely found any mistakes, save for some lack of punctuation in quotations and lack of commas in some places, but it's very negligible. Your sentence structure is nicely varied, and I don't feel bored reading your prose, which is super important. Even if your plot is spectacular, boring prose will turn the reader off very quickly, so great job for utilizing variety! One thing I'd like to address here (since I'm not sure where else I'm supposed to put it) is dialogue tags. I notice you use a lot of flamboyant dialogue tags, which is really great for EMPHASIZING dialogue, but if you use it too much, the reader becomes numb to it. But, you also don't want to use "said" and "asked" too much, because people begin to notice. It's just about finding that balance and choosing which piece of dialogue is truly important for the reader to grasp and make stand out in their mind.

☁plot (28/30): Your plot is obviously super well thought-out, though inspired somewhat since the whole "coven" thing is a bit played out. However, you really made it your own through the character dynamics (which we will talk about hehe), writing style, and your unique flair that you give to the storyline. Nothing ever feels bland, and I feel like I'm always on my toes, wondering what will happen. It's really interesting to see how the characters get closer as the plot intertwines them further together, until it explodes at the end from the high pressure. I feel like if the characters weren't so compelling, this plot wouldn't have stuck out to me that much, because most of the time, the plot is very passive so that the characters are allowed to shine, which is a bold move that a lot of contemporary authors don't KNOW they're doing until they realize, oh wait, my characters are cardboard and they suck. The buildup and suspense within the plot is super well done, as well as the more mellow parts that fill in the gaps between important scenes. If there IS one thing I would change, it's to make the intro maybe a tad longer and explained a bit, so that the reader isn't jarred by what's happening. Anyway, awesome job!

☁characters (20/20): I literally have nothing to say here. The character dynamics are flawless, as I gushed about in the plot section. Alice and Megan are a great duo to center the story around. They work very well with each other and by themselves, they're super interesting characters to follow. I have a super soft spot for Yoongi, (because obviously) and at first, I wasn't sure if you were going to develop him or not, especially since Alice is getting it on with Jungkook, so I was a little confused. But, you really pulled through at the end, and I feel like everyone is so unique yet believable in their backstories and their motivations in the things that they do. Alice ultimately helping Yoongi to suppress the pain that he feels around him is such a perfect character dynamic that I can't even describe it. They're like puzzle pieces. To add onto that, the side characters don't feel like mere side characters; they have real roles in the story and don't just stick around to further the main characters. Their powers are SUPER fitting, and you obviously thought about it a lot so that their personalities would be compatible! I especially love that Taehyung has the ability to control minds; it was my second fav ability next to Yoongi's! Also, I would like to address one thing here. The sign that a reader gets ANGRY with an MC's actions and calls her problematic and all that means the author did her job, and that the MC is behaving like a person that is flawed and not perfect. If the MC does no wrong, it would be rather boring for the person to read, which is how you get a lot of Mary Sues in YA novels, because the authors are so preoccupied with making the MC "clumsy" as their only bad trait that they forget to make an actual character :) sorry wow that was vindictive... anyway, GREAT JOB OVERALL!

☁writing style (19/20): The details are what really stand out to me about your writing style. You have a way of conveying information that makes me feel like I'm really there. It's not too self-serious, yet it's not TOO light-hearted and careless, either. It's a very mixd balance. However, I'd like to talk to you about tone and how it goes with your writing style. I know that you edited this book from your earlier version, so I feel like in some paragraphs, the tones switch from really casual and almost conversational with the reader to serious and brooding, lingering on the heavy details of the scene. To make this transition less jarring, just read your things out loud and see if it makes sense to you (basically see if it gives you whiplash). Ponder how each chapter should feel, and maybe incorporate both the light and dark elements in each paragraph so each of them feel smoother.

☁flow (9.5/10): The pacing of each chapter feels very natural and flows nicely. No paragraph is way too long nor too short, and the chapters are a perfect length that doesn't make me feel overwhelmed. (which I feel a lot lmao) One thing I noticed is that some chapters end a little jarringly, as if it was supposed to be the continuation of the same chapter. Maybe consider add a bit of a wrap-up thing if the chapter is supposed to NOT be a cliffhanger, and if it is, which I noticed some are, then you have nothing to worry about!

☁total score: 114/120 or 95%!

Talk about impressive!

☁optional advice nook: consider changing your title in some way, make description include Alice and Megan, light copy edit for grammar and dialogue tags, look for jarring tonal shifts between paragraphs, make the intro a bit more explanatory to brace readers.

☁song nook: Here are some songs I thought of while reading this! I looked at your Coven playlist for some of these songs, but I also went with the overall mood of the book, which seems more gritty and dark than anything else. Hope you enjoy these! 

♔Red Moon by KARD♔
(I mean... self-explanatory)

♔WHEN I WAS OLDER by Billie Eilish♔

♔Black Out Days by Phantogram♔

♔WHO DO U LOVE? by MONSTA X♔
(depicts love triangle between JK, Yoongs, and Alice perfectly)

♔Red Desert by 5SOS♔

EVERYONE, CHECK THIS BOOK OUT RIGHT NOW! I'm sure many of you guys have read it already since it's super popular, but if you have, you guys know just how good this book is! If you like magic, romance, and 18+ content in general, this is the book for you. The author is my BEST FRIEND ON THIS APP (yes I came out and said it y'all) SO IT WOULD BE GREAT IF YOU GUYS SHOWED HER SOME LOVE!

☁summary: I feel like I'm being repetitive, but I genuinely loved this book, and I'm super sorry if I was being nitpicky throughout the whole thing! This was the first story of yours I ever read, and I fell in love with your writing ever since. Your progress as a writer is staggering, from the character dynamics to the writing style and variety in diction and sentence structure. I'm so SO excited to see how you grow as a writer in another year from now.

Aaaand... that's it for the review! Comments, questions, concerns, please let me know. It feels weird starting round 3 of Tsuki... I can't believe I actually stuck with this for so long! But I'm really glad I did because I'm super excited to see everyone's lovely books in the future!  

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