OO1  PICKY POSTCARDS

by ella_rowan

𝗧𝗜𝗧𝗟𝗘- 5/5

It was interesting, and I liked how it just wasn't postcards but picky postcards and that made it more unique. It was super simple and straight to the point - which I liked since it told me exactly what the book was going to cover.

𝗕𝗟𝗨𝗥𝗕- 4/5

I overall liked the blurb, it gave me exactly the information I needed about this book. The contrast highlighted also made me want to read the book even more. However, I would suggest maybe putting the blurbs together. The entire first paragraph has a lot of unnecessary details. While it does help create more of a contract, it would be more beneficial for the blurb to be one paragraph. This does not include the disclaimer and the bolded section.

𝗕𝗘𝗚𝗜𝗡𝗡𝗜𝗡𝗚- 5/5

The author's note was humorous, and the book started almost immediately. It was humorous and a great first one to pick for the upcoming postcards as it told me what the vibe was going to be without being too upfront about it.

𝗚𝗥𝗔𝗠𝗠𝗔𝗥- 15/15

I hadn't spotted any major errors.

𝗪𝗥𝗜𝗧𝗜𝗡𝗚 𝗦𝗧𝗬𝗟𝗘- 9/10

Goodness gracious the amount of times my jaw just DROPPED on the floor is insane. I liked how raw and honest all those reviews felt — like they came straight from the soul. I read the interview and I know you didn't write them specifically, but good job on finding those reviews and putting them together in such a humorous way.

𝗣𝗟𝗢𝗧- 15/20

There wasn't much plot in the book, due to it being a compilation of postcards, but the content inside does match with the blurb. It was overall very entertaining to read the postcards.

SURROUNDINGS- 7/10

The most world-like attribute I could think of from the book was the postcards. They're a bit interesting and could be made quite a bit better. The reviews didn't really give me a vivid picture either ( like most bad reviews ).

CONTENT INSIDE- 6/10

Very funny and entertaining but there is one major issue and that is chapter organization. Now, it may have been more of a problem to be since I was reading it on the app and got an ad after every chapter, but I do think the book could benefit from grouping the postcards together by country/continent / alphabetically. There are so many from the same places that it would make for an easier reading experience if every postcard from one country/continent was on one chapter. As for alphabetically arranging it, it would make it easier to just go through and see different postcards for you favorite place and also just to give it some sort of order.

PACE- 5/5

I liked that they were short and to the point, it added to the humor.

ENJOYMENT AND ENGAGEMENT - 5/5

I wish I could give extra points, but I don't think I can. It was a very humorous, fun book and a quick read too. I enjoyed the book very much and it made me laugh so many times as well.

TOTAL MARKS- 78/90

OO2   PRANTAP PARASHAKTI : PAVING WAY FOR HIM

by dwarkaratna

𝗧𝗜𝗧𝗟𝗘- 2/5

I'm not quite sure what the title it. It seems to be very grammatically incorrect. As I am not Hindu, I am not sure what exactly the goddess Parashakti stands for ( google did not help much ), but since it's a goddess I'm assuming Subhadra is Parantap's goddess. That leads to the first problem; Parantap is supposed to be possessive of Parashakti. And 'Paving Way for Him' should be 'Paving the Way for Him'.

𝗕𝗟𝗨𝗥𝗕- 4/10

The blurb talks about the main conflict in the book, but it can be much shorter. The first 3 paragraphs can be shortened to one, as it's just talking about what happened before. The 4th paragraph is fine, but since the last 3 paragraphs are all questions they can also be shortened to one paragraph. Additionally, if you were going to mention her co-wife(?) you should mention her name in there as well.

𝗕𝗘𝗚𝗜𝗡𝗡𝗜𝗡𝗚- 2/5

The beginning wasn't very interesting. It started out with an author's note(?) and then with an unformatted subheading the story started? I'd suggest formatting all of your subheadings correctly so they don't look like the normal text. The first piece was super cute, and I liked how you started each of the pieces consistently.

𝗚𝗥𝗔𝗠𝗠𝗔𝗥- 12/15

Nothing major, just a few problem with possessives on nouns. There are some other problems too, but those were the ones I saw the most often.

𝗪𝗥𝗜𝗧𝗜𝗡𝗚 𝗦𝗧𝗬𝗟𝗘- 6/10

I thought the writing style was a bit choppy, though that was mostly due to the grammatical errors. Some of the things were also phrased in ways we wouldn't normally phrase things. The writing also didn't have much flavor and the dialogue sort of seemed the same for both of them.

𝗣𝗟𝗢𝗧- 15/20

It was cute and wholesome for the most part. I wasn't all that invested though based on how the plot was laid out.

SURROUNDINGS- 7/10

Everything related to what they were doing had a fair amount of detail, however their surroundings weren't described as much.

CONTENT INSIDE- 3/10

I want all that engaged, mainly due to the writing style. The chapters were good in length, not too short. However, if you will have a little blurb that breaks the fourth wall, then you must include something that shows that it's an author's note. I also noticed in the author's notes it was talking about how it gives context to the things that are about to happen in the chapter, I'd suggest writing out the context in the chapter itself. Also POV breaks: unnecessary. If the point of view needed to change, I'd suggest making a different chapter for each point of view or making it in 3rd person and writing out the change in the point of view in a sentence.

PACE- 4/5

It was a little fast, I think everything could've been explained a little bit more, just to make it feel more realistic.

ENJOYMENT AND ENGAGEMENT - 2/5

I didn't enjoy it very much, but maybe because it's the sequel and I haven't read the prequel and due to the high number of nit-picky errors I pointed out.

TOTAL- 57/90