005 The last philosopher

by NickEasy 

TITLE: 4/5

BLURB: 3.5/5

BEGINING: 4.5/5

GRAMMER: 13.5/15

WRITING STYLE: 8.5/10

PLOT: 19.5/20

SURROUNDING: 8.5/10

CONTENT: 9/10

PACE: 4/5

ENJOYMENT: 9/10

reviews:: The storyline is fun and full of excitement, with plenty of twists to keep readers hooked. The fantasy world is well done, and the characters are developed nicely with solid backstories. The dialogue and motives make sense, but the pacing could slow down a bit in places. It'd be great to see more attention on other characters, not just the protagonist, and add more rebellious moments and details about the world itself.

TOTAL: 84/90

006 My Ex Doesn't Die [Season One] 

by lilac_minded 

TITLE- 4/5 MARKS

BLURB-3/ 5 MARKS

BEGINNING- 4/5 MARKS

GRAMMAR- 3/15 MARKS

WRITING STYLE- 8/10 MARKS

PLOT- 16/20 MARKS

SURROUNDINGS- 6/10 MARKS

CONTENT INSIDE- 9/10 MARKS

PACE-3.5/ 5 MARKS

ENJOYMENT AND ENGAGEMENT- 3.5/5 MARKS

TOTAL- 60/90

The book story line is great developed . Could have focused on sentence / dialogue making . Many important parts of the story had grammatical errors . The plot of the story is very predictable you could have tried any new what if situation at place of trying already used scenarios . You lacked character profile development . Dialogues could have been interactive . Side roles were not to mark . Detail the story line and event You focus is clear on what you are writing and how you are going to present it just mould it in a new shape .

007 Walk with the shadows 

by Silmarilx1701 

TITLE- 4.5/5 MARKS

BLURB- 4/5 MARKS

BEGINNING- 3.5/5 MARKS

GRAMMAR- 10/15 MARKS

WRITING STYLE- 10/10 MARKS

PLOT- 18/20 MARKS

SURROUNDINGS- 8.5/10 MARKS

CONTENT INSIDE- 7.5/10 MARKS

PACE- 5/5 MARKS

ENJOYMENT AND ENGAGEMENT- 4/5 MARKS

TOTAL- 75/90

Review::

Your writing fits the genre well, but adding more philosophical depth and energy could enhance it further. The world-building and mystery are strong, though minor grammatical errors and some unrealistic lines can break immersion. Additionally, parts of the plot feel too familiar. If you explore more unique storylines, it will make your work stand out even more and keep readers fully engaged.

008 The Daughter Of Stones 

by nickstruutinsky 

TITLE- 5/5 MARKS

The title is appealing and it fits the story. It's also easy to remember and grammatically correct.

BLURB- 5/5 MARKS

The blurb introduces the story and the characters very well. It's very professional sounding and it sounds like a blurb you would see on a published novel. I really liked the last sentence from the blurb: "But when the fate of humanity is at stake, he answers the call, rolling his eyes and swearing to all the five high gods." It really shows Bal's personality to the readers and draws them into the story.

BEGINNING- 5/5 MARKS

I loved the prologue! It introduced the world and history of the story very well. I could picture it as a narration in an opening scene for a show or movie. The first chapter drew me in and made me want to keep reading.

GRAMMAR- 10/15 MARKS

There were spelling errors throughout the chapters. Also places where incorrect words were used and where words seemed to be missing.

WRITING STYLE- 10/10 MARKS

The writing style was very well done! Descriptions and information are worked into the story well. The descriptions of the characters and the scenery are done well. It's easy to picture everything. The writing style is very professional and I felt like I was reading a published novel.

PLOT- 20/20 MARKS

The plot was interesting and it had me hooked from the beginning. The exposition introduced the world and the characters well. I liked that the plot went back and forth between the high stakes politics with the King and then to Bal and Brienne's high stakes adventure. I'm excited to see where the story goes.

SURROUNDINGS- 10/10 MARKS

The world was very easy to understand. The prologue introduced the history and information well. Additional information was worked into the story well. I liked the descriptions of the wielders' towers. It's clear a lot of thought went into the crafting of the world and magic.

CONTENT INSIDE- 10/10

The chapters were on the shorter side, however, the content was engaging and the progressed the story well. The characters are intriguing and unique. The relationship between Bal and Brienne is developed well. I like that everyone seems to know Bal is descended from Freye. Usually in situations like this the characters try to hide it. I loved the funny moments with Bal and Brienne. I also liked Priam and I hope nothing bad comes from his attempts at neutrality. I also loved Iliana and her many potions as well!

PACE- 5/5

The story progressed at a good pace and it was consistent throughout the chapters.

ENJOYMENT AND ENGAGEMENT- 5/5

I enjoyed this story a lot and would definitely continue reading! I got so wrapped up in the story I couldn't believe I had read ten chapters already. The plot drew me in and kept me hook. I also enjoyed the humor in the story. I loved when Brienne yelled "Leg!" and Bal got hit by the barkeeps prosthetic leg. It was so funny! I loved this line from the third chapter: "And when you are popular - everything becomes politics." I also loved this line from chapter seven: "There's a very tiny difference between simple and dumb." I would love to have some of Iliana's magical tea that stays the perfect temperature lol!

TOTAL- 85/90

Overall, the story was intriguing and interesting. The plot draws readers in and makes them want to keep reading. The characters are all interesting in their own way. I loved the humor in the story. The world is well-thought-out and introduced to the readers well. It's all very easy to understand and the readers don't get overwhelmed by the information. The descriptions are also worked well into the story. The story needs an edit to fix the spelling errors and incorrect/missing words. The cover of the story is very pretty! It's easy to see all the elements on the cover and it's put together very well. It looks like the cover for a published story. The images at the top of the chapters are also very pretty! Good luck with your story!