Review by: Tae-s-bear
Author of the book: Seong_Grace

Title :: 5/10
My review will be based on the 12 chapters that have been posted till now. I had to give you a 5 because the chapters are not based on Jane's pursue and struggle for her dreams.

Cover :: 2/10
The cover picture is showing a horror hospital but the story is completely different from the cover picture. It doesn't really give the readers an idea about the theme of the story.

Description :: 6/10
The description shows the story in short form but it could have been more attractive to attract the readers.

Pace :: 9/10
The pace of the story is really good. The reader can clearly understand what is happening and when a new character is introduced.

Concept and plot :: 15/20
The plot is amazing but the characters should be more descriptive. Since the story just started I'm excited to see where it goes.

Characters :: 7/10
You should give more description about Jimin. The description of that specific character is slow-paced so try to give some more description. Again, this is just the beginning of the story so that's what I feel right now.

Grammar :: 5/10
There are many typing and grammatical mistakes like mistakes in the usage of pronouns like he/she. One mistake that needs to be corrected in chapter 9th is that it should not be belly big it should be 'big belly'. There were other errors too so you may edit them for clarity of the text.

Writing style :: 4/10 
According to me, readers can face problems when more than two people are there in a group conversation so try to give names to them or please mention numerical numbers to them then they can be easily understood. You may also write POV in each chapter so the readers can understand easily. You can also give the name of the specific place where the incidents are occurring. All this will lead to more clarity.

Overall impression :: 5/10
It was difficult for me to understand the conversation as the names were not mentioned. Another suggestion is that you can try to make more sub-stories which can make the real story more engaging without harming the entire topic.

Total :: 58/100

Extra :: The plot is interesting and the female lead is handling her character amazingly but the story should be more engaging. The story is written in a bit of a chaotic way so it's difficult to understand as the places/settings and characters are changing rapidly and there is nothing to guide the readers. So as suggested above add POVs and other advised tools.

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