Author of the book Writer_Bhavana
Review by imogenogucci01

Title :: 5/10

It's nothing new or innovative, I would love for you to change it, come up with something that makes people curious. You're making use of a popular troupe, make your book more attractive so that more people want to read it.

Cover :: 4/10

I can't even tell you how many books I have seen with that exact same cover image in that same font I suggest you change it because I don't think anyone would want to read your book if fifteen other books have the exact same cover.

Description :: 4/10

The description isn'tintriguing, if I came across this book on my home page, I wouldn't read it.

Grammer and Vocabulary :: 3/10

I noticed you are not very strong at this field, but there are many people on wattpad who can help you edit your work plus there are softwares like pro writing aid and grammerly to also help you proof read your work. As I read, I started to question if english was your first language as there was a lot of malapropism in your work. There were also instances where you used words that generally mean the same thing but differ in terms of context and suitability for example the word telling, I noticed you tend to place this word where it isn't needed for example "listen to what, I'm telling" instead of"listen to what I'm saying". I suggest you get an editor as I cannot point out each an every word you have used incorrectly.

Pace :: 2/10

I felt like everything was being thrown around carelessly. Your readers didn't even get to know your characters, especially your MC, everything was happening too fast. I wish I was eased into her life and her routine so that I could be able to connect with her as opposed to her just being some characters in a book. The length of your chapters is far to short for any real things to happen, increase your chapter length.

Concept and Plot :: 0/10

There was nothing new, some chapters even felt like they were an after thought as they were not well coordinated with each other. You were making use of a very popular troupe but you did notreinvent it, I felt like I could predict everything that was going to happen. Also, you failed to properly incorporate Rajesh into the story, he just popped up towards the end and everything was fine? A huge Deux Ex Machina which is a no.

Characters Development :: 2/10

Your characters are two dimensional, I think this directly correlates with the length of your chapters and the pacing of your work. As a reader I felt no connections to your characters. You missed out on so many instances where you could have made your characters more human, one of them being that you tend to tell us what is happening as opposed to showing us. For example, you say, "she was frustrated and angry" how about you describe this and say "her nostrils flared and her hand balled into fists".

Writing style :: 2/10

I was not impressed by your writing style, it was all over the place, for a new adult book, this writing style does not convey the age of your audience, I thought they were 15 and 16 year olds at some point because of your writing style. I suggest you read more books in this genre and see how other author's portray their characters. I hope there is an improvement.

Overall impression :: 2/10

I cannot tell you how much I rolled my eyes, even from the first chapter I was discouraged to continue reading. I don't like feeling like doing a review is a chore but this book made me feel like that, some of your choice of vocabulary and character mannerisms were those of a teen fiction book as opposed to a new adult one, this makes your characters -especially the MC- come off as whiny and immature.

Rating of the book: 3/10

I didn't enjoy the book, my first impression of it was that it would be a lighthearted read but it actually made me stressed because every other sentence had something wrong with it. I 100% see potential, you have an amazing story going on but the execution of it isn't good.

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