Author of the book user_thv
Review by : Tae-s-bear

Title :: 8/10

The title is really unique and attractive. Well edited.

Cover :: 7/10

The cover is okay and yes it is also matching with the theme.

Description :: 3/10

You need to keep in mind that description is that part, which will influence the readers to read the story. A short gist cannot give more reads. You need to make it more confusing and catchy which will make the reader curious about what the story consists of.

Pace :: 4/10

You fasten the important parts and slowed the substories. You need to give emphasis on the main subject.

Concept and plot :: 4/1

The concept was good but the writing pattern is very odd. All the sub stories are overlapping the actual one.

Characters Development :: 5/10

All the characters fit well but Y/N's character is somewhat over- fictional, readers would not relate with that character because this story is lacking reality.

Grammar andVocabulary :: 7/10

There are some typing errors that you need to fix. while reading the story readers might have problems.  So try to recheck before posting any chapter. Try to add some new words in the story. Increase your vocabulary. Same words have been used several times.

Writing style :: 5/10

You have tried to write the book as a movie. But you need to know that there is a difference between a book and a movie. In a movie we watch it, which helps us to remember and recognize situations more prominently. But when we read, we try to imagine ourselves and visualise it. Our mind takes these two things in two different ways.

When we are writing a story,  we basically write two stories, a main story and a substory which has a light effect on the main story.

You need to make a story  particular which will be emphasing more. Put less focus on sub story but you must keep writing it simultaneously.
Sub stories also shouldn't end in 1 or 2 chapters also it shouldn't pop up in every chapters.

You were focusing on both the stories (love story and the murder cases). You must keep the main story, on the top.

Overall impression :: 5/10

Writing pattern needs to be improved. Some areas are not explained properly.
At some point after reading it felt that there are so many characters added, without any point. They  all are superposing each other.  Characters need to be properly introduced. A brief introduction would do.
Rectify your errors, keep writing and keep learning.

Rate: 5.5/10

Total: 53.5/100

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