Review by: patricia_s_fictions
Author of the book: BTSarmy_692

Title :: 4/10
The title of the book is interesting, but it is not matching with your current storyline, your story genre is Rom-com. Your story isn't complete yet so I don't want to judge it too quickly but whatever you do make sure that your story is related to the title.

Cover :: 3/10
The cover is way too blurry. The fonts could be more different and bold. The picture of Jungkook is not proper (it is in landscape mode) which leaves empty black space in the design. Try to add more elements to it like sub-text because, in Wattpad, readers judge a book by its cover. 

Description :: 0/10
You've written nothing about the story in the description. Instead, you wrote why you are writing this and your (armies') feelings. You have to add a few lines or any situation related to your book so that readers can understand what the book is. Descriptions help gain readers. You may include the purpose of the story (like what you have done currently) but try to add a description too.

Concept and plot :: 5/10
Everything in the story happens suddenly. The pace is too fast as the whole story is in dialogue form so it doesn't leave room for descriptive writing. It is okay if your story is long but don't cut out the content. Right now the plot seems a bit empty. A good way to avoid this is to plan your story beforehand. Add incidents/events which hold meaning and link to the story.

Pace :: 4/10
As I said before the events are occurring very fast which may make it difficult for the readers to understand the story. At moments, there is no relation between the chapter and situations occurring which may be due to the fast pace of the book. In this case, readers tend to skip your chapters or even the book.

Characters :: 3/10
The female lead seems dumb her and also her name is a bit odd which may make your book a bit funny, not in a good way. Judging names is wrong and an author can choose any name but remember that the audience may not be kind enough. Also, it appeared like Jungkook just allowed anyone in his home without knowing them. I know it is a fictional story but pay attention to minute details to enhance your story and characters.

Grammar :: 2/10
What I noticed in your book was wrong use of ellipses and excess use of exclamations when not necessary. In some places sentence formation was wrong. Avoid using a lot of informality in writing. Grammatical mistakes were common in your story. To avoid these mistakes you may proofread the chapters and edit the story.

Writing style :: 3/10
When you are writing in conversation style you have to be very careful while forming sentences because here you are describing situations through the conversation without using action tags which is really difficult. This type of writing style is rarely used because it doesn't allow descriptive writing and can also be a reason why your story was fast-paced. You may try to explain everything deeply to avoid this or can change the style of writing.

Overall impression :: 5/10
I think you need to focus on your grammar more. Plots and emotions are very well needed and that's what gets lost in conversational style of writing. If you need suggestions on how you should write do read some books on Wattpad which have been praised for their plot and writing. Don't be upset. You will learn with time. Keep writing and keep entertaining. Good luck <33 

Total :: 29/100 

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