Review by: patricia_s_fictions
Author of the book: itz_army_bish

Title :: 7/10
It is a common Title. You should have chosen an uncommon one to attract readers.

Cover :: 8/10
The picture and graphics added to the cover look pretty good; also the fonts.

Description :: 10/10
The blurb you've written is amazing. I personally like it a lot. The two line poems were very fine, and the deep meaning of love is really attractive. Nothing much to say. It is perfect.

Concept and plot :: 5/10
Again, your storyline is common. A college girl falls for her teacher and starts liking him, and vice versa. Then the loop goes on. Instead of writing this, try to add a few substories to make your story more attractive without hampering your baseline.

Pace :: 5/10
Your pace of writing is not so fast or not too slow. But adding extra materials makes it more lengthy. Work on it.

Characters :: 7/10
The characters you've added are suitable. I feel like Y/n is somewhat nerdy but it's up to you, you've executed the characters, but few characters seem so common which makes readers get bored.

Grammar :: 3/10
You got 3 just because of your vocabulary. You should pay attention to grammar. While writing a story you shouldn't write in an informal way (like using IDK, IDC, etc). The way you've written the quotations and conversation seems like they are not talking to each other but text. Adding (-_-) in the middle shouldn't be used. Writing (hWAt) in the conversation is the wrong way to describe emotions. Use words and put emphasis on using uppercase words. Writing 'I' in lowercase is a huge mistake I have noticed several times. Adding ("......) and breaking the paragraph should be avoided. Don't use it excessively and right after that you've started the quotation, it is wrong. I would like to say that do notice these mistakes and try to correct them. Also, try to give warnings if the book contains mature words. With these points, you can improve more.

Writing style :: 4/10
Instead of decorating the chapters try to focus on your writing style. You've given such a huge gap in the first chapter, often in the middle of the paragraphs which may make readers skip the chapters or even the story by mistake. Try to write it in a formal way instead of writing like you are talking or texting. It makes the reader assume that you are not a good writer. Hence, try to be descriptive and poetic with your writing. It affects your story.

Overall impression :: 6 / 10
From your book title and blurb, it was going good but when I read your first chapter I started to feel half way. Adding extra situations which are not needed, giving huge gaps in the middle, wrong breaking of paragraphs, improper use of ellipsis, and informal writing was noticed. I would suggest stress on your writing skill and grammar more. And rest of all the things are fine. We all learn with time. Keep writing. I hope you have a great writing life. <33

Total :: 55/100

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