Review by: Tae-s-bear
Author of the book: GoldenMockinjay

Title :: 6/10
The name does not match the updated chapters for me, but I'm not judging it right now as the book is in its early phase but if it's unrelated to the story then I think changes might be needed. Putting these points aside, the title is still appreciable as it is unique and attractive.

Cover :: 5/10
The cover is well made and pretty but try to add more elements to it. Right now it looks a bit empty like something is missing. You can try adding a subtext to it. Try to use a better background (maybe a darker one) because we want Taehyung on the cover to stand out.

Description :: 10/10 
The description is perfect. It is engaging and eye-catching like it should be. It makes the reader curious and eager to read the book. Well done!

Pace :: 9/10 
The story is written at a slow and steady pace which is amazing. Also, every situation is described very nicely which makes it more understandable and descriptive.

Concept and plot :: 18/20
I can't say much about the plot of the story as I already mentioned that it is in its early phase but judging till now, it fulfills all the desires of the readers. It has a bit of everything; mystery, entertainment, and probably romance in the upcoming chapters (I can't say anything about that yet as there haven't been any romantic scenes). I'm really excited to see how the story unfolds.

Characters :: 10/10 
you have described the female lead in a very descriptive way and also left something for the readers to think about like the reason for the arrest of her brother. I really admire that. I can't say much about other characters as they haven't been unveiled yet.

Grammar :: 8/10 
In chapter 2, when the female lead was talking with her parents about going to Seoul, there was a sentence "her father said with a smile" it is mentioned 2 times so please correct it. Except that I couldn't find any grammatical mistakes or typing errors.

Writing style :: 8/10
I really appreciate the pattern you used to write the story as every situation is described very clearly even without the mention of any POV but I would suggest you mention the flashbacks or time above the specific part without using this ' ⏪- -▶️- -⏩' Sometimes usage of ' ⏪- -▶️- -⏩' can get confusing in case of flashbacks. If you don't want to write 'Flashback' as a heading then you can mention the time and date at the beginning of every chapter and write the events according to them. So for writing a flashback you can mention a time and date before the current date and time used in the chapter or book.

Overall impression :: 9/10
It was an overall good experience reading this story but again as I have been saying this that the story just started so it's difficult to say anything. If you maintain this performance throughout the book then it can come out as a great fanfiction. So do what you are doing but keep the points mentioned above in mind and try to implement them in your book.

Total :: 83/100

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