Review by: Tae-s-bear
Author of the book: AavaniSingh

Title :: 4/10
The title should be more creative and attractive. It is too long. Try to make it shorter and catchier.

Cover :: 6/10
The cover is good. It has been well edited but try to make it more colorful and add fonts to it. Right now it looks monotonous due to all the greys and blacks.

Description :: 3/10
There are many grammatical mistakes in the description. This may make it difficult for the readers to understand what the story is about. Make it more engaging by adding some interesting dialogues from the story or a catchier explanation.

Pace :: 3/10
You should go in a slower and steadier way as the time skip is rapid. It may confuse the readers to understand the situation. Do write and explain each situation more.

Concept and plot :: 12/ 20
The concept is good but you have to explain every situation in a detailed and poetic way that will engage readers. The story also contains mature themes like abuse and spanking so do mention proper warnings before that specific part/chapter or the book because these topics can trigger some readers. Let the readers know what they are getting into.

Characters :: 7/10
All the characters are explained well except Y/n as in some parts it says that she is well mannered but after some time she is cursing in that very chapter so it looks like the character is not planned well/beforehand so please give an exact definition of her character.

Grammar :: 3/10
There are many minor grammatical and typing mistakes so please recheck it and make the necessary corrections. Also, do spend time improving your grammar skills as there are some errors in sentence making.

Writing style ::3/10
I think you should give a gap between the time skip and conversation as it makes the story a little clumsy. I think you shouldn't use write like this -'Jin:' when you are describing the situation or the upcoming situation as it's looking like the character is telling something. Do make sure to add POVs for better understanding.

Overall impression :: 3/10
According to me, you should bring the characters one by one in the story to make it more engaging rather than all at once. Also, don't always use short forms for words like Y/n's grandmother as 'gm'. Give every individual their name (except the protagonist if it's a Y/n story). If it's husband and wife then depict them as Mr and Mrs or it's very confusing to understand. Do work on your grammar skills and try to read books by established authors and analyze the pattern of their writing. Take this review in a positive light to improve more. Keep writing!

Total :: 44/100

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