Winner - LAJoyner

Runner Up - KimSoojin1112

☙ The OT7 Haunting by LAJoyner

Title : 5/5

The title illudes to the idea of the BTS (OT7) being haunted.

Cover : 5/5

The color scheme of the cover gives off that spooky-haunted vibe with the dark grey's and foggy-ness used. The title and blurb are both clear and easy to read, along with the authors name.

Description : 7/10

The blurb gives the overall impression of the main theme, but there are some questions that can raise confusion for the reader. For example you mentioned the OC character as being excited to help with interior design, and a wandering spirit. However it is not mentioned at all that the OC might be the spirit. Reader's may be thrown off thinking this is a book where the OC is an original friend to the members and has nothing to do with the spirit, which could be misleading.

Plot : 15/15

The plot is very creative. It is interesting to see the POV of the OC (who is the spirit) and their feelings towards the members once they buy the building. It is also interesting that you added a dark element to the story to really give it that haunted vibe, making the OC have to run from and seek help from the dark entity that has been coming for her.

Vocabulary : 10/10

I did not run into any issues with vocabulary. Everything is spelled correctly and the vocabulary used is at a level that is accessible to many readers.

Grammar and Punctuation : 13/15

There are some grammatical errors throughout the book. Mostly around dialogue tags where the commas and periods need to be switched. For example in chapter 1- 'Suddenly, he stops and visibly shivers, "Did you feel that chill?' - There should be a period after shivers. - Suddenly, he stops and visibly shivers. "Did you feel that chill?" - So it would read like that. There are more instances of this throughout the book.

Pace : 5/5

The pace throughout the story is good. Everything transitions well and you don't leave any plot holes. One scene smoothly leads to the next as the members deal with the weird happenings taking place around the building.

Character Introduction and Development : 7/10

The very beginning of the story, when introducing the characters, introduces them as "they" saying things like "they peer out" and "the guys" so it does not directly introduce any of them until you mention Jungkook's facial expression. While the members are pulling up to the building, even introducing them such as "The seven members of BTS pulled up in front of the building, peering out of the van windows." That is just a suggestion for a more in depth introduction. Throughout the story we learn more about their personalities as they all respond differently to the weird situations going on within the building.

Writing Style : 15/15

The writing style is easy to follow along with and flows well. As mentioned before you create a well rounded plot without leaving questions that aren't to be unanswered later. You use transitions well to help tie the story together.

Overall Evaluation : 10/10

Overall I enjoyed the plot a lot. It is original with the main POV being from the OC character, who still has a lot of emotions and conflict despite being a spirit. You also add the eerie-ness vibe that makes a good ghost story once you introduce the dark presence that enters the scene.

Total - 92/100

☙ Life of Secrets by KimSoojin1112

Title : 5/5

The title is a good length and references the overall theme of the story.

Cover : 4/5

The color scheme of the cover works well. The cursive over the original text of the title is a bit distracting, and the cover creator's name at the top is cut off so it is hard to see.

Description : 6/10

The blurb briefly describes the plot of the story. I will point out that there are various grammatical errors in the blurb. "Hatred, Loneliness, and Misery, No idea of her origin or some unsolved mysteries..." 'Loneliness' and 'Misery' do not need to be capitalized. Also adding a transition word between misery and no would make it structurally better.

Plot : 13/15

The plot was intriguing. I immediately felt bad for Soojin when he finds out "Uncle Haru" is actually her real father and she learns of her mothers death. It is a creative plot, and can be fleshed out more revealing more of the characters emotions internally.

Vocabulary : 9/10

The vocabulary used in the story was clear and makes sense to the reader. It is at a level that is accessible to many people and works to pull the plot together. There are some instances where a word is misspelled or you used "you" when you should have used "you're." (Chapter 5- "You gonna be okay, Soojin!") should be "You're going to be okay, Soojin!"Grammar and Punctuation 11/15
There are various grammatical and punctuation errors throughout the story. The biggest being your use of ellipses (...) As the rule is to use three (...) but many times you only used two or four (although there are still many instances of you using three). There are also errors within dialogue tags such as commas being where periods should be and vise versa. Also, after ending dialogue with a period the next word should be capitalized.

Pace : 4/5

The pace does feel a bit fast at times. Soojin finds out that 'Uncle Haru' is her real father almost immediately into the book as she's being given to him to move away to Busan together. A little more interactions within her own family would fit into the plot nicely before she is suddenly being givenaway.

Character Introduction and Development : 7/10

The main introductions of characters really only discuss their ages, as Taehyung is only 8 and Soojin is his younger sister. There is not much insight into their personalities until later on in the story when we start to see who they are as people by their way of actions and reactions.

Writing Style : 12/15

The writing style is overall easy to follow and flows well. I will say there is an overuse of capitalizations and exclamation marks to get the point across, which is not necessary. For example when a character is angry, upset, or excited it is a bit over-emphasized. Another example from chapter five that really stuck out to me was your sentence "SOOJIN!!!SOOJIN!!! WHERE ARE YOU?! ANSWER ME!!" This tends to make the readers feel as though they are being screamed at. It would be appropriate to write "Soojin! Soojin! Where are you?! Answer me!" As this also clearly gets the point across.

Overall Evaluation : 7/10

The plot was very interesting and you were very creative with the overall idea of it. I suggest focusing on spell-check and toning down all of the capitalizations throughout the story. It held my interest as I wanted to learn more about Soojin's family secrets and you did a nice job of making am 'edge of your seat' read as I continuously needed to know more.

Total - 78/100

☙ Dark Empire: Devil's war & Love by Seong_Grace

Title : 5/5

It is an interesting title and gains the readers attention.

Cover : 3/5

The aesthetics of the cover are nice. The soft colors blend well together. The cover itself does not really represent the devil or sins in any way as it only shows face claims of the main characters. Adding this element would really help fit the vibe of the story. Also the font of the graphic designer is a bit too translucent so it is hard to read.

Description : 8/10

The description sets the plot of the story well and let's readers know what to expect without giving away spoilers. There are some sentence structure and grammatical errors within the blurb. It should read 'That Heaven pities on the innocent souls" rather than "that heaven pity on the innocent souls."

Plot : 12/15

The plot is unique, in terms of the devils and the representation of the seven deadly sins. Sometimes it is hard to gauge what the story is about due to the errors in sentence structure, but the overall theme of the devils and the Dark Empire is intriguing.

Vocabulary : 5/10

The vocabulary overall fits the story and most of it is easy to understand, however there are various misspelled words throughout the story.

Grammar and Punctuation : 8/15

Grammar and punctuation many times throughout the chapters are incorrect. There are various misspelled words, and other various words either added to sentences that don't need to be there, or missing from the sentence completely. Also with the dialogue tags, periods and commas are used in the wrong place of each other. Also make sure when you are using dialogue, the punctuation marks go inside of the last quotation mark, not outside of it.

Pace : 4/5

The pace seems a bit fast at times, with scenes jumping ahead to the next scene. Adding more transition scenarios between scenes can help tie them all together more, such as adding a task or conversation between characters that flows well into the next part of the plot.

Character Introduction and Development : 10/10

You introduce your character well and with a lot of description. From the very beginning you describe Taehyung as being the owner of the cafe, and then describe how others drool over and try to seduce him. Throughout the story you introduce the other characters too in a way that makes them easy to understand.

Writing Style : 7/15

You have unique and creative plots, and some very original ideas in how you present them. My biggest feedback is to work on sentence structure because throughout the story there are many sentences that are written incorrectly with improper grammar and punctuation, which becomes distracting from the plot.

Overall Evaluation : 6/10

The plot is original and creative. As mentioned in writing style, focus on working on sentence structure, vocab, etc.

Total - 60/100

LAJoyner

KimSoojin1112

Judge - SSears9

Thank you so much for judging so fast and providing the participants with such detailed reviews.