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Book Title:: Ace Of Hearts
Author: _wordmist_addict_
Genre: Romance/Humour
Reviewer: TVD_Lover1999

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● Title:: 3/5

I understand why you chose the title that you chose. Your male love
interest's name is Ace. But I find the title-Ace Of Hearts to be a bit melodramatic and cliche.

It also doesn't go with the story in my opinion. When I think of 'Ace of hearts' I think of the playing cards, or even heart breakers for that matter.

But Ace doesn't even seem to fit the bill for a heart breaker, he
doesn't like women in general.

I suggest choosing a better-fitting title for the story. It should be catchy and memorable, but also reference the plot of the story.

● Cover:: 2/5

By just looking at the cover, I automatically think that this is going to be a fantasy romance or a dark romance. That's the vibe that I get from your cover. But by reading the story, it's the complete opposite in both aspects. I also find the font on the cover to be quite plain.

It looks like someone took a photo
off of google, and then slapped a text on it. Your cover isn't very eye-catching to
me. I do like the photo used, but I've seen this same photo too many times before.
It's a very common one. Your book can't stand out if it's using a common photo
for the cover.

● Description:: 6/10

There are a lot of tense shifts in the blurb alone. There's also not a steady flow. It looks like you're attempting to be poetic, which is admirable and a good idea, but the way that you've worded everything; it just doesn't fit. It also looks like you rushed it too much, and didn't focus on the wording. There was no
hook for me, and that's important. Your blurb needs to draw readers in, and it just didn't do that.

● Protagonist Usage:: 1/5

You state that Eva is innocent, yet I didn't get that vibe from her at all. If it's important to your story that she appears innocent, then I suggest focusing on that more.

When did you think of 'innocent' what comes to mind? What makes them innocent? To me, she seems like a normal girl. Both of your characters are also very contradicting. They will say-or do-one thing, and then say-or do-the complete opposite afterward.

For example: when Ace tells Ryder
that the only way he will marry is if there's a business arrangement. Well, right after that conversation, he speaks to his father who proposes that he get married to inherit the company. Ace told his father that he would never marry, and then he stormed out. Aside from that, I find Ace and Eva to be very unrealistic and unrelatable. Eva doesn't have a backbone or any self-worth. She allows Ace to talk to her in such a horrible way, yet just stands there and talks about how hot he is.

No one is hot enough to allow me to forget who I am. And Ace is just like any
other bad boy in a Wattpad story. He's arrogant, doesn't do love, and cold-hearted, and somehow manages to fall for the 'good girl' if you can even label her that.

Eva comes off more childlike to me than she does innocent. Just some of the things that she says and does make me think of my twelve-year-old sister. You write from both of their points of view, so it's easier for us to see what both characters are thinking. But, their thought process is the same.

While reading from both of their perspectives, I couldn't tell a difference between the two other than the fact that they have different lives and want different things. Your characters happen to read each other's minds which is incredibly unrealistic, and it was just off-putting to me personally. Not only is Ace a horrible person to girls, but he also treats his friend like trash. There is nothing admirable about him in my opinion.

● Plot:: 4/10

Don't get me wrong, cliches can be good and all, but this story was the
definition of a cliche. There is such a thing as a 'good' cliche, and a 'bad' cliche. A bad cliche is practically the replica of another book, or incredibly similar to one. While a good cliche is taking a bad cliche and changing it up to make it different.

Your story would fall under the category of a 'bad' cliche. I know that sounds mean, but that's the name for it. This book was just too similar to a lot of books that I've already read on this platform. Bad broken boy falls for a good
girl, after being forced to marry her. This reminds me of "The wedding
contract," which is another book I read on here.

Ace hated women because he
believes they are all gold diggers, yet offers Eva money to marry him which she inevitably falls for her. That's also incredibly predictable. But if he thinks women are gold diggers, then why pay a woman to be his bride, and then fall for her? He's proving his point. Throughout the story, there was a tremendous amount of info-dumping. You gave too much away at one time, and it was hard to remember. You were throwing large amounts of information on us, and you don't want to do that. This is a way you can bore and confuse your readers.

You also had a habit of telling us rather than showing us what was happening. By
doing this, you made it very hard to relate to the characters. The whole thing just sounded listy, almost as if you were checking off events that you wrote down for the story. It didn't come across as natural to me. There were several occasions where you engaged directly with us readers, which you don't want to do. It pulled us from the story and messed up the flow to me. You weren't very descriptive either. It was hard to visualize anything, including feelings as well.

I don't even know how many times you referenced Wattpad, which had the same effect as directly engaging with us. I found the story to be quite rushed, and it was hard to follow along with and to understand. It just didn't seem realistic.

● Flow:: 6/20

You wrote this story as you would talk to a friend. Writing a fictional
story, and thinking are two very different things. When you changed scenes, it
wasn't natural or subtle. It was choppy and forced. I suggest taking your time and easing into things. There's no reason to rush. But I did find myself getting stuck on quite a few words, which then messed up the flow of the story.

● Character Development:: 0/10

Everything was happening so quickly, and it prevented me from being able to get to know the characters. Their
personalities and thoughts seemed all over the place, it was hard to keep up with. So, unfortunately, I didn't get much of a chance to see any growth if there was some.

● Grammar and Vocals:: 5/15

First of all, there were many times when you would have two or more characters speaking/doing things in a single paragraph. This is a huge no-no. When you do this, you're mixing up their actions, and even their dialogues. It's a sure way to confuse your readers, and it is a writing error.

There were several times when you wouldn't even place any end punctuation at the end of a sentence when your characters would speak. You also had a habit of switching tenses throughout the story. You must choose one-past or present tense-and stick with it. There were many misspellings and grammar errors as well, which altered the flow of the story too. There was a lot of 'he said and 'she said' too frequently. You must broaden your vocabulary. Most of the time your readers can conclude who is speaking, so it's not even necessary.

● Writing Style:: 3/10

The way that you wrote-as mentioned previously-was a lot like how you'd talk to a friend, or even how you'd write in your diary. Due to all of the spelling and punctuation errors, your story came out choppy and hard to read.

● Overall:: 2/5

By reading your book, I can predict that this was written for fun maybe?
That's okay and all, but if you're wanting a book that has little to no errors, or if
you're wanting to publish, then there is work that needs to be done. I
recommend rewriting it and then editing it to the best of your abilities.

● Enjoyment:: 0/5

Because of all of the errors, I found it difficult to enjoy your story. I love the genre, and even the cliche-bad or not-but, it was too hard to keep up with while I was reading it.

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Total marks: 32/100

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