MIKingsley  is the winner of the Thriller/Horror category of the Sunset Moon Awards. As per one of the prizes they gave me an option to focus on and give feedback. Again, congratulations on being the winner!
(chapter 7 descriptions/emphasis on emotions)

You have such a rich vocabulary that can paint the events clearly. However, I do feel like you're not using it to your full potential. Emotions are high and you do describe all the loss and grief but I can't connect to it because the whole chapter you've only described it. You told the readers what happened but you never truly showed it.

For example, the awful night with her and her friend was only described (maybe that was purposely done but I would still change that). For example, add some flashback with them talking, include some dialogue, add even more how Emily felt other than sorrow and grief. I feel like you were repetitive in that a couple of times which wasn't needed. Add something extra that could keep the readers engaged.

I really like the storyline and I'm compelled to know more. I would definitely include some dialogue and reduce the amount of you just describing what has happened. However, this truly is already a good book and congratulations on your win again ❤️