Reviewer: Lily A_Tiger_Lily

Author: Shivkuti_Live

Book: Unknown number

Blurb: 4/5

It was good and interesting. The call themed dialogues and the start made me curious to know what is going on. Especially when you wrote "Knock, knock" at the end. It was a good way to leave a mysterious and suspenseful impression on the reader. Good job. 

Cover: 2/5

As much as the blurb, title effects a story, the most important factor is cover. I have to say, later one disappointed me. The cover was not good if I am being honest. It was too sharp to be read at first. I suggest you to take services from a graphic shop but if you want to make one yourself then you can follow the given suggestions: 

The theme of the cover does not match the theme of the plot or story line. It should be gray, dark, cosmos dark colors. 

The font style can be better. The cursive and thin style is not visible and can't be read at once. I had to squint my eyes to read it. 

You should use cursive bold font.

The color scheme must be matched with the story. You can use the dark elements in making covers, such as mysterious shadows of boys, guns etc. 

Title: 4/5

It was unique and well chosen. The whole story revolves around the incident of a wrong and unknown number. Good choice.

First impression: 3/5

If I give my opinion according to the story line, then it was good but if I give it according to the style of the description, then I would be disappointed. It didn't tell, what's going on. How and who the characters are? I didn't even know what's happening. You should focus on those factors as well. 

Reader's interaction: 8/10

It can be seen. All the readers are greatly enjoying the story line as well as mingling with characters. Good job here.

Plot: 5/10

As much as the storyline is good, the plot has so many gaps in it. It is lacking in the scenes, the background, the character description. As well as the events' reason, their background. The plot must be a reasonable and well settled sequence of events. It got me confused at many parts. I know that most of the writers keep this way to make their readers confused and suspenseful. But believe me, it gets negative marks. Most of the readers leave the story in the middle because they don't get the event and happening and leave it. Keeping suspense and mystery is the story is called with separate technique and making the plot confusing one is not in that factor. 

There are many scenes where I was left out bewildered or with no sense at all. Like, when the main leads were rescued, you showed the talk between the female lead and police, but how was that possible? At the same time, they were kidnapped? And then we had our male lead being injured, surrendering to police while the scene from the kidnappings and talking to his boss was still going on. 

It's all so confusing. I know you solved it all and will also unwrap the story in future. But I personally think you should consider this technique of yours. If you want to show past and present at the same time,don't mingle them all in one chapter. Start the past incident in one and then end that chapter in the past as well. Then start the next chapter in the present,then end that in the present as well. 

The pace is fast as well. It's only 6 chapters, and the main leads are already falling for each other. Here, the story doesn't make sense. Many characters are introduced in hurry. 

Grammar: 7/10

This factor needs improvement. There were only dialogues in the story, so not much grammar was used, but still, there were a few points where improvement is needed. 

Emotions: 4/10

The story doesn't have this factor. The whole story is in a dialogue manner. There is not any description of character's behaviors, their mind conflicts, their thinking, or their whereabouts. Therefore,no emotions are seen in this story. When the girl was kidnapped, the boy was asked to kill all of them… I couldn't feel any anxiety or emotions. The only marks I gave was just because of the way you put a bit of suspense through your dialogues. except that, there is none. 

Character's development: 3/10

As we have talked before,no description is given about characters. Hence I can't see if there is any development in their behavior, their thinking or their inner feelings. 

Writing style: 3/10

Let's start here. You need a lot of improvement in this factor. Your whole story is only in dialogues. If you want to make your story popular or want more people to engage with it, you must make it a story not a dialogue. The way you have written is the technique of writing dialogues. There is nothing telling us the whereabouts, characters, happenings of events, backgrounds of surroundings, emotions, feelings. Nothing. The whole story is only the exchange of lines between characters. Try to write it as a story , not as an essay or a dialogue. Your story seems to carry only talks between characters that's too without any description. 

Now let's come to the emotions. As I have told you before, you should use words so yeah,no emotions are there as far as I can see. You didn't explain actions, emotions and characters. There is only talk in the story. You should focus on your character's behavior. Tell us how they think, what they think, the reason behind their every action. You should also focus on their mental and inner conflicts. 

Overall: 4/10

You need a lot of improvement. Even thoughI enjoyed the story line but plot has many improvements to go through. Hope to see a better version next time.

Total: 49/100

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