Reviewer : Lily A_Tiger_Lily

Book: Unidentified darkness

Author: VArmyGhost

Blurb: 4/5

It's good and interesting. It caught my attention as well as made me interested in knowing more. However, I personally think you can make it more interesting, once you place more dialogues as well as any interesting scene from the story. Anyways, it is good. 

Cover: 3/5

It is good and eye-catching , however, the theme of the cover is bloody red and the text is also in red color. The thing which is making its value less is the text is mingling with the background. The font is good but only the color is making it less appear and the background is hovering it all. Hope you can do something to manage it better. 

Title: 4/5

It is well chosen and relayed to the plot. It defines well the darkness of the hearts and souls which is untold and not identified accurately. It matches the theme of the plot as well as the storyline. 

First impression: 3/5

I was so excited to start the story after reading the title and blurb but unexpectedly it didn't come of my expectations. The start was all of a sudden. Till the end of the day, I didn't know who was speaking. I mean who the narrator was. The scene, the background, the characters as well as the event is undescribed. I didn't feel any motivation to continue the story but I had to. So I moved forward to the next chapter. The rest will be discussed later. However, the first impression on me was not good. 

Reader's interaction: 3/10

This story has less readers, therefore the less interaction is seen. Therefore, I don't know how to give this factor marks. But still a free reader is there, enjoying the story so yeah…

Plot: 6/10

The plot is unique but the problem is it is not executed well. Means, there is not cleanliness, the well arranging and management of events. Time skips are too long and unexpected. This type of  plotline is rarely seen but there are only a few writers who could pull it off. You surely can be one of them but unfortunately, at some places your technique was not good. It lacked emotions, background as well as the well placed and well settled sequence of events. You showed huge time gaps and didn't tell js the routine and daily life of characters. I hope you can work it off and I expect to see a better version soon. 

Twist: 8/10

It totally took me off ground when you told us that this world is combined and many supernatural things are slo there among humans. Even though it was all of the sudden, it was unexpected. And after that when the female lead asked that cat lady to let her join, the way the cents took pace from that time to till the end… It was all shocking and surprising. Well done. 

Emotions: 5/10

This factor is weak indeed. You need to explain the character's inner conflict,the battle with themselves while doing any work. Their irritation, their motivation, their happiness etc. But unfortunately you lacked these things. The emotions are not described well and it leaves gaps in characters' behaviors. 

Grammar: 7/10

It is good and you have a good grip on words. The only marks I cut are because of some punctuation mistakes. They are seen many times where you missed punctuation like comas, quotation marks and full stops. Otherwise it is good. 

Characters development: 6/10

The character development is not seen as much as I expected to see. Sure, we can spot it on different points, the point of my saying is…

The change in the character's behavior is all of a sudden. Like there is no slow burn in this factor. They change their behavior all of a sudden. In this aspect we can say the characters are not described well. We don't know what mental conflicts they have, nor can we predict their acts. So it's a negative point.

Writing style: 6/10

It is fair enough but all the things mentioned above makes it less interesting. Like the lack of events, daily life routine,character explanation, backgrounds, inner conflicts, emotions etc. It all affects  the writing style and its interesting points. Hope you can consider the given points and make it a better version. 

Overall: 7/10

Total: 62/100

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