Reviewer: Rabi rabisworld02

BOOK: True mates

Author : ES4918230

Blurb: ⅕

It doesn't seem interesting to me. No description or any event is mentioned here in blurb to let us know what the story is about. It is not enough to catch a reader's attention. I would suggest you to use a few interesting dialogues first, or write any interesting scene from your story, taking place at a major twist or some lines,which can make readers eager to know more. 

Cover: ⅕

Not much work is seen on this. It seems like no effort was put forth on that. It's a simple fan art with fonts. The Font style and color choice is also something not appealing to eyes. I had to squint my eyes to read clearly what's written here. It's mingling with the background color scheme. According to the theme and plot line of the book, the cover is soft and pretty. But I think you need to work on this.

You can take services from a graphic shop. According to your book, it's an alpha, beta and omega dynamics story. I  think it would look good to have wolves' pictures or using their photos as face claims with main leads in front. 

Title: ⅗

It is well chosen and matches the plot. But it is obvious that it is not enough to grab the reader's attention well. The name seems too common and already gives us the vibes of werewolves dynamics. However, it matches with the theme and plot line of the book. 

1st Impression: ⅘

Truth to be said, after reading the blurb, I didn't expect any good start. However, I clicked on the first chapter and it took me off my seat as how briefly you explained each and everything. It made me want to read further and further, which I did. 

Reader's interaction: 2/10

Unfortunately, this story has votes but doesn't have people commenting their thoughts or sharing opinions on the story which is disappointing. Feedback is much needed for a writer to be motivated. However, I think you can interact with your readers via your story. 

Ask them questions, ask for comments and share their thoughts. I am sure they would not hesitate to show their opinion. 

Plot: 7/10

At first, it seemed cliché. As I thought about just a straight deal and meetings. As well as their joint packs with nothing special. It was also like that. The story was going pretty smoothly when all of a sudden events took turns at 180°. As the story goes on, the story becomes more and more interesting. At some points I felt the lace too fast and at some points it was slow. 

The execution and placement of events were well settled. However, the emojis you used are not something to look upon. 

It makes the story seem cliché. You used emoji as chapter names as well. It gives negative vibes and gains negative marks both from judge, reviewer or reader. 
You can keep chapter names as Chapter 1, Chapter 2. Or you can name them according to the events happening in certain chapters. 

Twist:7/10

As I have mentioned above, I didn't expect the smoothly going story to turn out like this. It didn't give me mysterious vibes. But after a few chapters, actually a lot of chapters, I started to feel something off. Turned out it was something related to the past. As soon as it was unwrapped, I didn't expect that. Good job. 

Grammar: 8/10

You are pretty good with grammar and punctuation. I don't have any objection with this aspect. 

Emotions: 7/10

Let me be honest, you did a good job at maintaining them. However, I felt blank at some points. What I meant to say is, sometimes it felt neutral. No emotions at all, I couldn't detect what the character was feeling. I just read the text and couldn't detect the character's feelings. It's OK, it happens sometimes. All you need to do is focus. I know we all have lives ahead outside of wattpad and can't spend our whole time here, but writing is something which helps us to let out our emotions and feelings.

You can take this as a motivation to give your feelings a life through words. Let your words describe your emotions after you put yourself in the character's shoes and think about what you would have said or done, if you were them. It will help. 

Character's development: 6/10

I don't see much development or changing of behaviors in this story. All the characters are the same from the start till the last part is updated. I don't see much changing in them. And I feel like,according to the book and theme, the characters lead a simple protagonist style life which didn't need them to change. 

Writing style: 8/10

Let's talk about this factor. All the factors mentioned above affect this one and turn it up or down. You can use many literary devices to spike up your writing style. The thing which I liked most about your style is the way you describe the situation. Sometimes, we mess up with emotions and feelings but nothing can be discarded. It was beautiful and your way of conveying the scene deserves to be applauded. 

Overall: 8/10

Total: 62/100

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