Reviewer: Rubie RabisRubie

Author: RoyalPurple123

Book: Trapped in a tale

Blurb: 4/5

It was really good. At first I thought "oh no…. Not just a little girl going on adventure" but when I read further, I came to notice the crime genre as well, as it was described that the story will be containing crimes and mafia stuff, as well as how will that girl help herself and pass this expenditure. So yeah, I got excited. 

Cover: 3/5

It's so simple as well as, 

The background used is so dark and the font color and style can be changed. it will look good if you use a majestic font and some more graphic elements. You can take services from a graphic shop. 

Title: 4/5

It's really unique. Well suited to the plot? I still have to figure out as the story goes on. However, it's unique and mysterious. Having the ability to attract readers. 

First impression: 3/5

Well, at first it felt boring. I nearly lost my interest in this. The long paragraphs are the major cause of it. You can give some space between lines after each 8-10 lines. It gives a good impact. 

Reader's interaction: 7/10

Well about that, it can be seen. The readers are attracted to the story and share their thoughts about it. 

Plot: 8/10

When reading the first part, I thought it's just a story of a little girl having an expenditure. But when I read the second part about kidnappings, my interest spiked up. I didn't think it would be interesting. I have seen a few writers trying to pull this type of plot off, but you did a good job while handling this. It was unique and interesting. 

Twist: 6/10

Well, truth to be said, I didn't find any major plot twists yet. Surely, the story is going good but it still hasn't reached the main part yet. Your pace of taking events is slow.  

Grammar: 8/10

Your grammar is good. You just have a few punctuation mistakes here and there. 

Emotions: 7/10

Even though your writing style is good, somehow, in this factor, I felt something off. Like something was feeling unfinished. I hope you can work on it. 

Character development: 8/10

It was there and could be felt but as I said earlier, your pace of taking events is too slow, so can't say anything right now but the story has come to the stage where the behavior of character can be predicted. 

Writing style: 8/10

It's good and understanding. The way you describe the events and all. but you need to work on your pace as well as emotions. 

Overall: 8/10

Total: 74/100

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