Reviewer: May SeokJins_Yeonin_rh

Book: The Old Enchantment

Author: Coraline005

𝐑𝐞𝐯𝐢𝐞𝐰𝐞𝐫 𝐂𝐫𝐢𝐭𝐞𝐫𝐢𝐚 

Dᴇsᴄʀɪᴘᴛɪᴏɴ: 5/5 
It doesn't expose the plot and is really attention grabbing, it also gives me science fiction vibes so I expect a good plotline.

Cᴏᴠᴇʀ: 3.5/5 
That is a really beautiful cover but Beomgyu’s can be a bit brighter since he is in the middle, other than, no complaints at all.

Tɪᴛʟᴇ: 4/5 
It's a unique title but I don't know how it's related to the plot, yet it's eye-catching but also, it doesnt give me sci-fi vibes.

Fɪʀsᴛ Iᴍᴘʀᴇssɪᴏɴ: 5/5 
Don't the marks say it all?

Rᴇᴀᴅᴇʀs Iɴᴛᴇʀᴀᴄᴛɪᴏɴ: 10/10 
I was speechless when I saw it, its really impressive.

Sᴛᴏʀʏ Pʟᴏᴛ: 8.5/10 
Its one of my favorite plot genres so I expect a lot from it. I’m really enjoying it as of now, its really interesting with how much detail you put in the plot. The flow is smooth and even though the main leads met too soon they met in a non-cliche way but I feel like the plot is fast paced. Slow down a bit to describe how the female lead warmed up to the male lead.

Pʟᴏᴛ Tᴡɪsᴛ: 7/10 
Honestly speaking, I cant think of any plot twists because its a crystal clear plot except the part “how Beomgyu time-travelled”. So, you have to impress readers.

Gʀᴀᴍᴍᴀʀ: 7/10 
Your grammar and vocabulary is good but in some places you missed out on words. If you proofread it, you will be able to catch them unless you have a not so good grammar then you should let it go to an editing shop. Your punctuation is non-existent. Except for full stop, you don't use any punctuation. 
You are supposed to use commas like this:
“I love you, Jin,” She said.
And a full stop when you write like this:
“But I love someone else.” He turned around and walked away, his figure slowly becoming a distant memory.

Hope you keep these points in mind while editing your book.

Eᴍᴏᴛɪᴏɴs Aɴᴅ Fᴇᴇʟ: 5/10 
Due to your bad grammar, I was unable to feel the emotions properly in some places thus you really have to improve your grammar. You use big words so it's essential to have, especially proper punctuation, and grammar. Like just now, how I used commas, if I didn't then you wouldn't have felt the importance of using punctuations.

Cʜᴀʀᴀᴄᴛᴇʀ Dᴇᴠᴇʟᴏᴘᴇᴍᴇɴᴛ: 5/10 
I would really appreciate it if Byeol has some character development. I don’t like how desperate she’s for money and harming herself like that but it compliments the plot and Beomgyu’s personality. But as it's still ongoing, I can’t tell much about it.

Wᴀʏ Oғ Wʀɪᴛɪɴɢ: 8.5/10 
You have to slow down and be a bit more descriptive. your writing style is really good with usage of proper sentence structures and a strong vocabulary but you have to describe certain scenes a bit more.

Oᴠᴇʀᴀʟʟ: 8.5/10 
I love the book and cover and the way you presented it, I’m enjoying it as well. Besides the things I mentioned above, your book can be a watty sci-fi winner, but we wish because its a fanfiction but lets hope. Hope you improve your mistakes and I’ll be here seeing that because I’m keeping this in my library.

𝐓𝐨𝐭𝐚𝐥: 77/100

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