Reviewer: Lily A_Tiger_Lily

Writer: Lovatic_HarryHook

Book: The lost revenge

Blurb: ⅘

It surely caught my attention, especially that dialogue. It is good and describes well what the story is about. Gives suspense and chills about the story and makes the readers anxious and eager to know. 

Cover: ⅗

It's so bright. Regarding the story, which is paranormal and has magic as a main element in it, I personally think the cover is not matching. The neon effect of red is making it sharp which is not well adored. You can use a blue mystic light effect and a magic ball as a background. With a creepy hand's shadow around it and the girl's picture, you can be shown in that ball with the Halloween effect of the font. I hope you got me and can change it. 

Title: ⅗

Even though it matches with the story and is well chosen. But it's not unique. What I meant to say is, many of the wattpad writers have stories with the same name so it doesn't have the unique aura to get the reader's attention. I have a few suggestions for names if you consider them.

Arcane: it means secret and mysterious. 

Instead of "Lost revenge" you can use "Lost vengeance". 

Malice Soul (It suits it well, with the theme) 

First impression: ⅘

It's really amazing and felt good. I got shivers crawl in my spine and suspense in me. I wanted more and more. The way you described the curiosity of that little girl, wanting to know what was going on with the parents. 

Reader's interaction: 9/10

Readers are really enjoying this story. I enjoyed it as well. Good job. 

Plot: 8/10

Having a plot of paranormal things or having devil's deeds and acts described in a plot is not something unique. But the way you pull them off is great. You placed each and everything well and described them well as well. 

Twist: 8/10

I was not expecting the girl's parents to send her away and I was even more shocked when I came to know the reason behind this cruel deed. Not only this, when the little girl grew up and met another, then openly talked, met another boy (I forgot the name actually, it was difficult for me to announce the boy's name).  The way they all were together just for their own desires and deeds, really pulled off some major twists in the story. Especially in the last when the girl was not anymore, I thought it would have a happy or at least an open ending, but it's OK. (I told this to my heart). I was not expecting this at all. 

Grammar: 8/10

Your grammar is really good and you have a firm grip on words. well done. 

Emotions: 9/10

This is something I would like to talk about. You did an amazing job while maintaining them. I wanted to just jump in the book and Bea the hell out of some characters, especially the girl's parents. But after a few more chapters, I could also feel the mother's pain and her love for the girl but still it was not enough for what the girl went through. 

Character development: 7/10

The story was good but I think this sector needs a bit of improvement. Everyone,till the story started, remained the same. There was not anything like "Character's development" seen. 

Writing: 9/10

Finally we are here and I would love to say that, it's really good to have someone who writes like how I exactly like. The way you described each and every emotion, the way you told us the happenings of events, the way you had us edging on the cliff, it was all worth of reading this book. 

Overall: 8/10

Total: 80/100

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