Reviewer : Elena  LUVB0TIC

Book : The Game of Love and Deceipt

Author : khionewrites

Description: 4/5 
Spectacular indeed, I have to compliment you for that. It stirred up different reactions from me, and believe me, it was all positive. The simplicity and clarity of the description was a perfect insight of the book, it didn't take away or give away too much information. Something you would want to consider when it comes to writing. The vocabulary is in a league of its own-- this was very much a wonderful first impression.

The only complaint I have about it is one I would consider a minor and easily-fixed mistake: lack of commas in certain sentences, but overall that's practically it.

Cover: 2/5 
》ERROR #1
It wasn't on par with the description and your writing in my opinion, there was no hint of relation between the book cover and the plot. There are also two main characters in the book, so it's vital to incorporate both of them into the cover. 

》ERROR#2
I don't find the red splatter/ swipe of a brush is essential, rather it's more of a distraction. The placement is off, and it doesn't add any spark to the cover.

》 ERROR#3
There is a noticeable cut between the woman's body and the water's surface, although the graphic designer attempted to hide it with the fog overlay, it doesn't really do much.

》SUGGESTION#1
My suggestion is you rely on other professional designers in this platform, there are hundreds of graphic shops floating around wattpad. I'm sure you will find your perfect cover in at least one of them. 

Title: 5/5
I am just glad that you took the unique route and didn't name the book "Lovehunt" only based on the plot. This title suits perfectly, describing that the hunt is a game of both deceit and love--which makes total sense.

First impression: 3/5
The main point is the title and the book cover when it comes to first impressions, as it's the very first thing readers glance upon. Personally, you got one of the two things I mentioned above. I am more than sure that with an even more outstanding cover, your book will shine more in the eyes of many.

As for your prologue/ first chapter, there are no words that could describe how much I envy you as a writer. I was appalled and blown away by your use of words, the figurative language and analogy that made your writing a literal gem! You didn't miss any of the details, which means that you poured a lot of effort into this book. That is always something I appreciate from hardworking authors like you. Wonderful work on that!

Readers Interaction: 4/5
Well, the story rocketed with a strong audience. There is a clear contrast between the amount of comments to the votes. This is not a sign for you to give up, sooner or later your work will gain recognition so never give up and keep going!

Story plot: 13/15
To start off, I want to discuss how the plot describes society's biggest problem, in the past and also in the future. This story defies the social classes in society, describing Sabrina as a voice of those who lack in finance, proving that money isn't worth everything. If this isn't a clear moral and a strong message, then I don't know what else to say. Stories are meant to inspire, because a word can change a single being. The Game of Deceit and Love did it for me. I was genuinely touched by Sabrina's stern character, and her will to stand up for herself against the elites. 

Following the previous statement, although there are quite a lot of books that are inspired by survival shows, or competitions just like yours. This book is still in the process of writing, so I have no right to determine or judge if this book will end up like what I expected it to be. I leave this up to you, to determine the continuing of Sabrina's journey in Lovehunt.

Plot twist: 3/10 
Again, there aren't any noticeable twists yet. The story is still entering the beginning phase, with character introducements and their backgrounds. Once it reaches the building part leading to the climax, there should be one or two major plot twists. The reason why this community made this an essential part of the criteria; they are what make readers stay. Losing a reader on the way because of a boring plot or an overdue update is the worst thing that could happen, gathering an audience is difficult work, making them follow and engage is another.

: ̗̀➛ SUGGESTION #1
Position yourself as one of the characters in the story, examine and create an image of how they would, think, feel or act. From here, move on and think of their background story ( which you already have ), and think of something from the past or something that will occur in the future, that would be unexpected for that particular character.

Grammar: 9/10
Flawless and smooth! I have to admit you must have the eye of a hawk, as I made my way through the chapters I couldn't spot any spelling or grammatical errors. Tenses are used consistently, and there is proper use of punctuation in a dialogue. This means that you have defeated my and most people's nemesis. One advice I would like to add on; avoid sentence fragmentation and use of abbreviations for formal writings. Again, this is only a tiny issue that wouldn't stand out to a reader's eye at first glance, but it is always better if you can improve on those parts.

Emotions and Feel: 9/10
I felt everything, Sabrina's sorrow, her multiple loss and undying love for Eric. My heart shattered when she found out he was already moving on, and taking her conditions into account, she was not clearly living her best life. During the couple's arguments I felt the desire to step in and somehow scream at both of them for constantly misunderstanding each other, that was how frustrated I was at the condition. It is a wonderful thing actually, the more anger you can stir up in a reader, the more you will succeed in creating a surge of emotion and response. This is to the point where they could understand and grasp the character's situations.

Character development: 3/10 
I have to cut this one off, being a reviewer means that I have to look at the overall view of the story: Sabrina entering Heartbreak Island as the Lovehunt begins. The readers are new to the story and were just given a snippet of their lives, so in short no character development.

Way of writing: 10/10
This could end up being an essay if I have to go on and compliment your writing style. It is just a masterpiece, you describe things in an unexpected way. I could almost envision the surroundings and the mansion Sabrina is staying at, all the details were displayed with a tremendous amount of preciseness and a certain flair. Vocabulary was used very well, there were almost no to little grammatical errors. Some paragraphs in my opinion were too long in length, but considering that it was for the sake of description, it would still be accepted. Just viewing from the reader's point of view, since some prefer reading shorter paragraphs!

Overall: 9/10 
You have almost no errors, in a lot of the aspects and I definitely enjoyed my time reading The Game of Love and Deceit. There is so much potential in you, and it is only your very first work! That is really impressive! Finally, thank you for choosing me as your reviewer. I hope you are satisfied with what I wrote, have a nice day!!

Total: 74/100

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