Reviewer: Lily A_Tiger_Lily

Book: Slave

Author: staend

Blurb: 3/5

It was good but still was unable to catch readers attention well. Actually the thing is, people usually don't read stories having this type of blurb or should I say theme. This is so common nowadays. So I suggest you use that dialogue you used in the last blurb. It would look good as well as add some interesting scene in it to make it more appealing to readers.

Cover: 3/5

It surely matches the theme but it is not catchy. The word "Slave" written in silver is not doing a good job. If you see this cover in a list of books, you can't read what is written. You have to squint your eyes to know... One more thing, you should put a face claim in the background. The hands seemed blurred and are not doing a good job. I would recommend you to take services from a graphic shop.

Title: 2/5

About the title,I don't think this name is doing any justice for this masterpiece. This title also is common for stories. The name gives us the idea of the story and the first impression after reading the title is what makes a reader eager. Reading the title for the first time, I seriously thought that it might be a story of a king or slave. Or an omega being a slave for his alpha. Usually, slave is used in the manner of pleasure. So... The first impression after reading this is relatable. You can name this story something else. I would like to suggest a few names if you consider them.

Strings of heart

Strings of fate

Chained to you

Fated to be yours

Rhythm of love

Melting Hearts

First impression: 4/5

Let's keep the title impression aside, and talk about the story's first impression. I personally think the start was abrupt yet good. I could feel the sudden wave of emotions in me. I felt anger, sadness and pain for the dying character. You made me curious to know what will happen next. Good job.

Reader's interaction: 8/10

Truth to be said, readers are enjoying this story much as well as interacting with characters. We can say, readers are getting engrossed in the story and the author has done a good job making their readers feel alive in the story.

Plot: 7/10

The plot is somehow.... Lacking at some places. First of all this plot and theme is common in wattpad. Second of all, I don't understand the fact that, when Jungho, the selfish demon wolf is so selfish as well as cruel and demonic, why did he send Taehyung for his son to have first? What was the use of capturing Taehyung? After this, when he was sent to Jungkook, the demon wolf didn't have any appearance not still. It looks like the author has completely forgotten about the character of the demon wolf and the purpose of him being captured. I know, the writer probably hasn't, it's just the story that is going on but only the scenes of Taehyung and Jungkook are there. No connection between Jungkook and his father is shown as well as between Taehyung and alpha. One more thing, Jimin was the best friend of Taehyung, he didn't meet Taehyung after he was captured by demon wolf but then suddenly appeared as a cousin of jungkook. Third, the stepmother of Jungkook, I can't pinpoint her relation to jungkook. Where is she now? What happens to her? What about that pup she demanded from Jungho?

These all scenes are confusing me bit I hope,the author will be able to clear it out

Twist: 8/10

I was expecting Jungkook to have already been mated with another person and have a daughter as well. Something is sick with his wolf as well as he can't seem to recognize his mate in his human form. You gave many unexpected turns to this story which can be called as twists. Good job.

Emotions: 9/10

As I have said, I could feel all the emotions from.the very start. The way you showed the agony and cruelty as well as the rotten behavior of a few characters made me feel grossed out and I wanted to jump in the story and lunch the hell out of them. Sometimes I smile and sometimes I have tears in my eyes. You did a good job at handling emotions in this story.

Grammar: 7/10

Your grammar is good and you have a firm grip over words. But still, you have a few mistakes regarding grammar as well as punctuation. Hope you can work on it.

Character development: 7/10

As much as you worked on emotions and good details about them,I am disappointed to say that you didn't do good work in handling the characters. The characters of Hobi, yoongi are still unknown. The character of the demon wolf is discussed only in a few chapters of start. After that the character of tae's mother was not discussed as well as the character of jungkook's step mother was discussed. The behavior of Jungkook is also confusing. Hope you can work on this factor as well and make it much better.

Writing style: 9/10

Your writing style is good and the way of depicting the emotions is good. You just lack the behavior of character's factor and I really hope you can work on it.

Overall: 9/10

Total: 76/100

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