By: @bigscar12

Reviewed by: TuesdaysLeftovers

Description: 3/5

The description is intriguing, but the immersiveness is kind of ruined once you acknowledged the fact that you did not know how to spell ddakji and your use of run-on sentences.

Cover: 4/5

I like your cover because it sets the tone and shows one of the main characters. My only issue would be that the text for the title is a bit hard to read.

Title: 5/5

The title is pretty much perfect. Not only does it convey one of the main themes, but it is also worded in a way that makes it intriguing for other readers.

First Impression: 4/5

The first few paragraphs throw the reader right into action, and it really drew my attention and made me want more.

Readers Interaction: 2/5

(Remember, the amount of readers and how much they interact with the book does not determine anything about the quality of a person’s writing. Reader’s interaction varies from many different things such as the writing style itself or amount of author’s notes among other things.)

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Story Plot: 6/15

I found the plot quite interesting, but there were a few parts of the book that seemed confusing or like afterthoughts.

Here are some of my notes or questions about the plot in specific areas of the book:
-If y/n lives in New York, why is the currency she and others use won? Wouldn’t she use dollars? (Prologue)
-I like the subtle dark foreshadowing when you wrote that y/n had to win the money even if she died trying. (Ch. 1)
-I’m a bit confused on how y/n could tell a guard was looking at her since they wear masks .(Ch.1)
-This might be confusion on my part because I’ve actually never watched Squid Game, but why is the first clause on the consent form that players are not allowed to stop playing when it was mentioned before that if anybody wanted to leave, they could just ask? (Ch.2) Continuing on this same point, how is consent form clause three that the whole game can be terminated if the majority votes for it? Wouldn’t that ruin the point of the games and contradict the other rules?
-y/ns intentions of stealing the woman’s purse are kind of unclear and the action seems sudden. (Ch. 4)
-The inclusion and new introduction of officer Junho implies that this book wasn’t planned very well, as the new introduction makes it seem like an afterthought. This might not be the case in reality, but this is just how it seems. (Ch. 4)
-The fact that a person can re-enter and leave the games at any point like how y/n rejoined them kind of defeats the purpose of what presumably makes the games actually terrifying or risky. Also, I thought the games were terminated? (Ch. 6)

Plot Twist: 8/10

So far there have not been any parts of the story that are significant enough to be considered a plot twist.

Grammar: 8/10

Your grammar is good for the most part, but there are some issues in your lack of punctuation and some inconsistent capitalization.

Emotions and Feel: 7/10

There have not been any significant emotional moments in the story so far, but the personalities you have put in the characters are displayed distinctly.

Character Development: 3/10

There have so far not been enough chapters to show significant character development.

Way Of Writing: 7/10

I like how you use a quite direct writing style in opposition to a more artistic one, and like I said in the Emotion and Feel section, the personalities you have put in each character are displayed well.

Overall: 8/10

Overall, I really like the direction this book is going. Despite some confusion in certain plot points, the book seems to be going in an interesting direction, and I’m excited to see what happens next.

Total: 65/100

If you have any questions, need clarifications, or elaborations about what I wrote here in this review, feel free to ping me (@TuesdaysLeftovers) in a comment and ask, I’ll try to answer as soon as possible. Thank you and have a nice day!