Reviewer : Rabi rabisworld02

Book : November story 

Author : Harry2411

Description: ⅗
It was good and had the capability to attract the readers. It matches the theme and the short storyline of the one shot. But I would suggest you add something more. Such as more dialogues or any other scene which can drive readers crazy. But what you have right now is not bad, it's good actually. 

Cover: ⅘
First thing first, it caught my attention. It is catchy and easing to the eyes. The text is blending with the background and the theme of the cover matches the story theme is something not many can put together. You did a great job in choosing the cover. 

Title:⅗
As far as this title is unique, I don't think it is catchy or pleasing. It is not attractive enough to grab the reader's attention. However, I think the title would match the story more if you can keep only "November" instead of adding "Story" as well. It looks odd and doesn't look good. I think the title "November" is more suitable.

1st impression: ⅘
First impression counts the impression I got when I saw the cover, read the blurb and got it in the title. And yes, it was pretty good. Even though the title didn't sit well with me, I wanted to give it a read because the cover was pretty attractive and the blurb was cute. 

Reader's interaction: 5/5
I think it depends on the writer as to how much they make their readers interact with the story and understand the characters. You did a pretty good job here. I was amazed to find such an interaction between your story, characters and readers. 

Plot: 5/15
As far as I have gotten the story, it was a plain simple story, which mainly revolves around the boy who kept his feelings hidden and at last lost his chance to have his childhood love. Even though the story is short, there are many scenes and things which are not even discussed. The whole story deals with only the boy's emotions. We don't get to see girl's perspectives much. The characters are described but not in a way where we can know more about them other than their emotions. 

This is a short and a 2 part story but I think you could have added something more, such as a few details regarding their daily lives, Y/N and Taehyung's life. Also the life of Hobi a bit. It would add a few more details in the chapter and would add something in the plot to understand the lives of the characters much better. 

There are not many scenes that's why I wouldn't say anything about execution but whatever you write, you wrote it with a passion and that's really excellent. The story is nor unique but not the cliche one as well. 

Twist: 2/10
Not seen. Seeing the story has only 2 parts which is also the only 2nd part which is detailed and has a good explanation. I didn't think that Y/N would get married to someone else, I didn't expect that, so yeah I gave you 2 marks. But other than that, there is nothing which we can call a twist. You can either turn it into a whole separate book where Taehyung and Y/N are given a chance again. Or you can keep it the way it is. 

Grammar: 7/10
Your grammar is not bad, it's good actually. You have a firm grip on words as well. Your vocabulary is amazing and the way you have molded every phrase into your own will make it much more beautiful and addicting to read. But there are a few minor errors in sentences which we would count as tense usage errors. 

Storytelling is always in the perspective of the past tense. Narration of the story always takes place in the past. There are a few occasions where you have used present indefinite and in the very next sentence you are back at using past tense. 

After that, you have used the 2nd a s 3rd firm in the past tense even after using the helping verb "Did". Which is against the rules as per grammar. You can say "How did you make it?" But using the 2nd/3rd form after "Did" is not something cool. 

Hope you can edit the mistakes. 

Emotions: 9/10
I was in tears all the time. You really played with my emotions. I could see the inner conflicts of the bit, even though the emotions of the girl were not discussed openly it was still the most emotional story I have ever read. Really girl, you have the potential to make people crazy. 

Character's development: 2/10
First we will talk about the description of the characters which is not provided much. Even though the emotions are still described in detail, they are also only from one's perspective and for this I think the author herself wanted to keep her story revolving around only the boy. After that, we don't have much idea about ghei daily lives and all. 

About the character's development, I don't think it was seen either. The boy was shown weak and hesitant in describing his emotions, he was hesitant and scared to break the friendship he had. He lived in his delusions and never got courage to confess his true feelings to the girl. 

It was from the start to the end. The boy remained scared and quiet, he didn't confess and kept thinking to himself. But I think the last message we got from him is that he would move on or would forget his hidden feelings for her. The courage to move on is also required so I think that's a change in his character as it will move forward. 

Writing style: 8/10
Your writing style is pretty good. You dealt with the emotions and execution really well. I believe that it's the writing style which either gives you the name or throws you in dust. The writing style is one of those things which makes the reader indulge in the story and feel the pain inflicted on the characters. 

Your writing style is good and captivating. But I think you focus mostly on the emotions. You should focus on other points such as character's development and other factors I have mentioned above. 

Overall: 7/10

Total: 57/100

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