Reviewer: May SeokJins_Yeonin_rh

Book: Mending Hearts

Author: PriscillaYiadom4

Dᴇsᴄʀɪᴘᴛɪᴏɴ: 3.5/5

Its okay, honestly, except the grammar mistakes. It does make me wanna read though because I am curious to know as to why they are not being able to conceive children. I hop you have a good twist for it.

Cᴏᴠᴇʀ: 3/5

Its plain and not that eye-catching, the couple doesn't look middle-aged, in my opinion, I mean they look around early 30s while your characters aelre around mid 40s, which is like really old, honestly. The font color should be changed to something darker because you can barely see the title, the subtitles and the author name with that color or you can use bold sans if you wish to keep the font color white.

Tɪᴛʟᴇ: 3/5

I don't know how you thought "not getting children" and the title matches. What is there to mend if you can't get children? I mean it's a bit saddening that they can't get their own children but they can always go for adoption or surrogacy or there is another method involving science as well. It can be better.

Fɪʀsᴛ Iᴍᴘʀᴇssɪᴏɴ: 4/5

It did catch my attention even with that title and blurb because I'm expecting a nice twist in the book.

Rᴇᴀᴅᴇʀs Iɴᴛᴇʀᴀᴄᴛɪᴏɴ: 10/10

Approximately 50 comments in one chapter with only 100 views and all of them are positive and I also see the author interacting well the readers as well. Keep it up.

Sᴛᴏʀʏ Pʟᴏᴛ: 4/10

Too fast, the pace is fast and the characters lives are so typical and cliché. It didn't feel like she had a rough childhood for her to have such flaws. She seems to have a bit below moderate living household but other than, her life is all rainbows and unicorns. Nothing special about it as well as the male character's life. With the way, she had so many miscarriages...many women stop after one or two max but you let your characters go through many and the fact that they still kept on going is immaculate.

The plot is simple and nothing to look forward to, I would say to give nice twists to keep them going and some humor and sassiness in the characters as well.

Pʟᴏᴛ Tᴡɪsᴛ: 5/10

As it's still ongoing and from the plot, it doesn't seem like it can have a plot twist but I am hoping you will give a good one because when I read the blurb, I thought it's gonna have a good plot twist since most of the plot is predictable.

Gʀᴀᴍᴍᴀʀ: 0.5/10

There are so many grammar mistakes, starting from missing words to missing punctuations. The sentence structures are slightly correct buand it also lacks proper words like here "Diana was born on the (a date)th/rd of May 1976 in Bronx, New York. She was the eldest among the 3 children, who were born to the Ghanaians."

See, how I changed up the sentences? That's how you are supposed to write. Also, don't give too many paragraphs, it ruins the look of the chapter. The blurb needs to get edited up as well. The tenses are mixed up.

What happened to grammar, dialogues and speech marks in the 4th part of the book? It's all messed up and I can barely understand anything.

Eᴍᴏᴛɪᴏɴs Aɴᴅ Fᴇᴇʟ: 0.5/10

I couldn't because of bad grammar and also because you kept your narration and their thoughts and emotions in the same paragraph.

Cʜᴀʀᴀᴄᴛᴇʀ Dᴇᴠᴇʟᴏᴘᴇᴍᴇɴᴛ: 2/10

I don't think this characters will have any development because they seemed already developed and accomplished their dreams except them being parents.

Wᴀʏ Oғ Wʀɪᴛɪɴɢ: 6.5/10

Its okay, simple. It's not bad but you have to more descriptive.

Oᴠᴇʀᴀʟʟ: 2/10

I would have enjoyed the book if it wasn't for the bad grammar. It's the only thing that made me stop reading the book. It needs to get edited so I siggest giving it in an editing shop or get someone with good grammar to edit it. The plot is cliché but I would still read it and I hope you will able to express the pain she went through after her first miscarriage and her second and her third and so on. Also, I think giving the backstory at the first was a bad idea because it doesn't make you wanna read the book after readers know what to expect, especially readers who have read a vast collection of books and genres, such as myself.

𝐓𝐨𝐭𝐚𝐥: 44/100

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