Reviewer: Rabi rabisworld02

Book: He broke me

Author: cherrykooksundae

Blurb: ⅗

First of all,I would suggest you remove those blue boxes from that dialogue. It is not giving positive vibes and seems cliché. Actually using emojis, stickers in blurb doesn't attract readers much that's why. I suggest you remove it. 

After that, your blurb is beautiful as you explained to us the theme and storyline a bit. But reading the blurb, the first impression I got was… Oh so it's a high school story. And just like other typical High school love affairs it would also have a bully and a victim. But I was proved wrong once I read further. However,to avoid these impressions to be put on the others and attract readers, you can add an interesting conversation or a scene from the story to Make it look attractive. Give us a glimpse of any scene and it will do a good job. 

Cover: ⅖

I am sorry to say but the cover did not attract me much. It was too bright and I had to squint my eyes because of the glimmer. It is not catchy enough. After that, the picture of only Taehyung gives us the idea that it's just a tae solo ff but no. It is a taekook ff so I would suggest you use an image of taekook as a background. Font style can be better as well. You can take services from any graphic shop out there. The ones I would suggest you are: 

Pandora under TheCharmsCommunity
Aurelous under Kpop_House
Mystical graphic shop under Magical_Community

Hope you can consider this all.

Title: ⅗

I would give it the marks for its matching for the plot line and story line. This title is well chosen and well picked according to the theme of the plot. But there is one thing for which I cut marks, that's the uniqueness. Sure, it matches the storyline but it is not unique. Not unique enough. But the title itself has the ability to catch readers. And I think that's enough for a book to have. 

First impression: ⅗

If we count it from reading the blurb, the first impression on me was not good. I felt this is gonna be so boring and cliche, having the same storyline as others. Upon this,I cut marks as it is counted in first impression. However, the impression made by the first chapter was above my expectations. 
Your choice of words and the way of describing the scene, it was all so exquisite. You are the first one I met who focused on surroundings and backgrounds. I appreciate you for that. 

Readers' interaction: 6/10

This story has less readers but those readers are having a good time reading this. They are interacting with the storyline and characters. I can see them sharing their thoughts and commenting on the story.

Plot: 7/10

The execution of the plot is well placed. All the events are described beautifully and explained in detail. No doubt is being left from any scene. I just feel the flow is too slow. Like the pace you choose to the plot is too slow. However, the marks I gave you are for the execution and details with which you attracted me more than enough. For the plot, I don't see anything unique except the elements and literary devices you used in the story. There are many stories with the same plot and storyline. The unique elements you used such as personification, metaphor. Your story is made unique by these devices and the way you used them at the right places. 

Twist: 4/10

First of all, the story is plain and no major twist is seen. I have read the story till the last update which was on the last date of July. I suggest the author upload it quickly. But I understand we all have our lives out of wattpad, still you gotta make an update schedule. Let's come back to the story part. There are many stories with the same plot, storyline and theme. The High school theme is overused by wattpaders and writers. I don't see any major twist in this one.

 A twist which left me shocked or surprised. You can spice up this story by something which the reader can't predict. Mostly these types of stories can already be predicted once a reader starts reading and I could also predict it. You gotta need some shocking turns to add in this story. Some events which can not be predicted and only then they will be considered a twist. 

Grammar: 8/10

You are really good with this aspect, only a few punctuation mistakes are seen such as missing commas where needed. The pronouns are misspelled at some places as well. 
But they are very few in number. Still I hope you can edit them. 

Emotions: 8/10

I just clapped for you in this aspect. I could feel many emotions stirring me. I felt anxiety of Taehyung, worry of Seokjin, smiles and happiness of them as well. You are very good at maintaining your character's emotions and convey them truly. I don't have any complaints about this aspect. 

Character development: 7/10

I can't say that this is not seen, surely the characters and behaviors of the story's roles are described beautifully and explained briefly. The development of the characters is seen throughout the story. 
But the only complaint I have is the Pace. The story pace is so low and therefore the character's development is also slow. The story has 25 updates and the character development is too slow. But the technique you use for the story makes the slow pace good as well. 

Writing style: 8/10

Total applause for this factor. You used literary devices very well and conveyed the plot and storyline very beautifully. 

Overall : 7/10

Total : 66/100

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