Reviewer: May SeokJins_Yeonin_rh

Book: Destined To Me

Author: Naveena_bts

𝐑𝐞𝐯𝐢𝐞𝐰𝐞𝐫 𝐂𝐫𝐢𝐭𝐞𝐫𝐢𝐚 

Dᴇsᴄʀɪᴘᴛɪᴏɴ: 3.5/5 
It made chills run down my spine but it can be portrayed better, don't keep too much space between the paragraphs and it has some grammar mistakes as well.

“Kim Taehyung  was curled into a ball, his body shivering as his hands were wrapped around his 5 year old son. He cried and begged the man before him to not hurt his son and him but the other just deeply chuckled, making them pain-filled sob to escape his lips.

This man was none other than his own husband,

Jeon Jungkook.

Was he just a sick minded person to hurt his own son and husband?

Or was there something more?”

Cᴏᴠᴇʀ: 4.5/5 
The cover is really beautifully done and is also really attractive. Honestly, it doesn’t match the theme, the blurb indicates that its a dark plot and the cover is the exact opposite but at the same time, it matches and I have a feeling the plot twist or why JK is being abusive is gonna be able to match it; the subtitles are barely visible so maybe bold it slightly. 

Tɪᴛʟᴇ: 4/5 
It's a common title but it matches the theme of the plot, it gives both psychotic and sweet vibes.

Fɪʀsᴛ Iᴍᴘʀᴇssɪᴏɴ: 4/5 
Everything, except the title, attracted me.

Rᴇᴀᴅᴇʀs Iɴᴛᴇʀᴀᴄᴛɪᴏɴ: 10/10 
Famous you are, try to interact and keep up with them as well.

Sᴛᴏʀʏ Pʟᴏᴛ: 7.5/10 
Its common, typical and cliche unless you have a good plot twist but the flow is smooth, the pace is fast but smooth,I would suggest slowing down a bit and explaining the situations more.

Pʟᴏᴛ Tᴡɪsᴛ: 3/10 
Its still an ongoing book so I can’t say much about it but I do hope you have good twists planned for it.

Gʀᴀᴍᴍᴀʀ: 7/10 
Grammar is good and vocabulary as well but you use too much punctuation, especially ellipsis. Dont use that too much, you should only use ellipsis if you wanna portray suspense like this:
“She did mention that but…”
Or hesitance:
“But I…” Marinette hesitated.
Or nervousness:
“Uh..hey...I...uh…” Alya stuttered as soon as Nino greeted her.

Other than that, you shouldn’t use it anywhere else. Also, don't repeat punctuations like double question marks and such, instead use an adjective to describe it like here you wrote ‘“Koo!!!!”’ but you should write ‘“KOO!” Taehyung yelled his name/called out his husband’s name, his voice loud enough to snap Jungkook back to reality.’

Eᴍᴏᴛɪᴏɴs Aɴᴅ Fᴇᴇʟ: 7/10 
Ellipsis were ruining the essence and the constant paragraphing as well. Try to describe them more and keep your narration and their thoughts and emotions in different paragraphs but I did feel like crying a bit seeing TaeKook so sad but that was ruined when they were doing it way too much. 

Cʜᴀʀᴀᴄᴛᴇʀ Dᴇᴠᴇʟᴏᴘᴇᴍᴇɴᴛ: 7/10 
The characters are common but they match well with the plot, they are really cute and it is a bit heart-wrenching as well but I feel like they are a bit over-dramatic. I mean yes it is sad that their son is mute and they can be sad about it and they can want to give their son a better life but the way they are crying 24/7, it looks like being a mute is a really sad thing which it is but they took it to an extreme, they don't love their son the way he is.

Wᴀʏ Oғ Wʀɪᴛɪɴɢ: 7.5/10 
It's good but you have to be a bit more descriptive, describe situations more like go in more in-depth with their son’s situation and their feelings, describe their daily lives more and don't just show them breaking down every few seconds, that is just plain annoying honestly speaking. 

Oᴠᴇʀᴀʟʟ: 8/10 
Its a really good book with an attractive cover and writing style, and with some of the improvements I mentioned above, you can be one of those good writers out there. As I saw that you mentioned that your english language aint great so I’ll suggest giving it to a good editing shop or get it edited by someone who had good grammar.

𝐓𝐨𝐭𝐚𝐥: 73/100

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