Reviewer : May SeokJins_Yeonin_rh

Book : Deep into you

Author : kimsuga86

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Dᴇsᴄʀɪᴘᴛɪᴏɴ: 3.5/5 
It's a bit confusing. I would suggest writing the synopsis first and then the dialogue.

Cᴏᴠᴇʀ: 4/5 
The cover is pretty and the fonts used match the cover really nicely but as the theme of the plot is floral then maybe adding a bit more touch of flowers in it would be better.

Tɪᴛʟᴇ: 2/5 
It's too common. Go for more fancy words or uncommon words and describe the plot too. 

Fɪʀsᴛ Iᴍᴘʀᴇssɪᴏɴ: 2.5/5 
The cover only caught my attention, nothing else did.

Rᴇᴀᴅᴇʀs Iɴᴛᴇʀᴀᴄᴛɪᴏɴ: 9.5/10 
One by four readers are silent but you have a fair amount of votes and comments. 

Sᴛᴏʀʏ Pʟᴏᴛ: 7/10 
It wasn't cringy, nor common or boring. I love how you portrayed it, you made Taehyung a man who loves flowers and it's natural everyone thinks of him as a gentle man but actually wasn't, he was psycho. I loved the concept. The book was short and I was thinking what you included in it and if your ending would be good or not and it was unexpected. The flow was a bit rough and the pace was fast but since you decided on a short book, I still feel it can be a bit slower. 

Pʟᴏᴛ Tᴡɪsᴛ: 9.5/10 
I definitely didn't expect him to do that at the end, it was really unexpected not gonna lie. 

Gʀᴀᴍᴍᴀʀ: 2/10 
Your book needs a lot of editing, I found punctuation mistakes, words missing and wrong sentence structures. 
You use a comma only before a verbal tag: "I love you, Jin," She said. 
And à full stop before an action tag: "But I only love May." Jin turned around and walked away. 

Your book is really good so please give it to an editing shop if you feel like your grammar is not good. 

Eᴍᴏᴛɪᴏɴs Aɴᴅ Fᴇᴇʟ: 3/10 
The pace of the plot was really fast and you are not even descriptive. Taehyung gave me creepy vibes but some of their actions make no sense like how can Lily fall in love with Jungkook just like that? Even though you wrote it in Taehyung's POV, you should have shown scenes/written dialogues where it shows why Lily loved Jungkook so much and also about Taehyung's feelings, it was all because of her beauty as in what he saw from outside which is like not appreciated unless you planned it, again, of course. 

Cʜᴀʀᴀᴄᴛᴇʀ Dᴇᴠᴇʟᴏᴘᴇᴍᴇɴᴛ: 6/10 
I don't see much development here and I do love the characters but they are too dumb and also, I found Taehyung creepy from the start. 

Wᴀʏ Oғ Wʀɪᴛɪɴɢ: 6/10 
Thank you for maintaining a single POV throughout the book but you have to be more descriptive and make sense when you write. You have to portray Lily's feelings towards Jungkook better because it felt kind of cut off. You can see a scene where they talk about Jungkook and Lily fangirling over him. 
Taehyung looked creepy to me from the start, so you might wanna work on it. You can write, first, that he saw something beautiful inside her, not outside before her beauty enchanted him even more. 

Oᴠᴇʀᴀʟʟ: 7/10 
Improve the grammar, slow down the plot a bit, be more descriptive. That's all I have to say, and also, I enjoyed reading the book, it was good. 

𝐓𝐨𝐭𝐚𝐥: 62/100

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