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-Reviewer May-

𝙱𝚘𝚘𝚔 𝙲𝚘𝚟𝚎𝚛: 7.5/10

The cover is beautiful, except for the part where you could consider using a darker shade for the fonts and adding the author's name.

𝚃𝚒𝚝𝚕𝚎: 8.5/10

The title doesn't have a proper connection with the blurb. The word, "melting" was mentioned in the blurb which fails to completely connect to stardust.

𝙳𝚎𝚜𝚌𝚛𝚒𝚙𝚝𝚒𝚘𝚗: 10/15

Some sneak peeks of the one-shots could have been added and you have to try and be discrete when you do so. The description was short but didn't expose the plotline.

𝚂𝚝𝚘𝚛𝚢𝚕𝚒𝚗𝚎: 19.5/20

Every story had a good storyline, which made me, as a writer, want to convert it into a book. I have no intentions to cavil on this but, a bit more twists in between would be appreciated.

𝙲𝚑𝚊𝚛𝚊𝚌𝚝𝚎𝚛𝚜: 8/10

The characters were cliché and plain. So, I'll suggest adding some personality traits like a pinch of weirdness, good sense of humor, shyness, bleakness, or disobedience...but either way, they do match the plot.

𝙳𝚒𝚊𝚕𝚘𝚐𝚞𝚎 𝙳𝚎𝚕𝚒𝚟𝚎𝚛𝚢: 13.5/15

The dialogues were okay but more emotions could be expressed through your words.

𝙶𝚛𝚊𝚖𝚖𝚊𝚛 𝚊𝚗𝚍 𝚅𝚘𝚌𝚊𝚋𝚞𝚕𝚊𝚛𝚢: 18/20

You are missing punctuations and your vocabulary is a bit weak. Proofread, and the punctuation problem should be solved. Read more books with good grammar and vocabulary. For that, I recommend New York's bestseller books. Don't use repetitive punctuation, use one before using a heavy adjective like yelling. Also, you should use commas before verbal tags and periods before the action tags.

𝑆𝑡𝑟𝑒𝑛𝑔𝑡ℎ𝑠 𝑎𝑛𝑑 𝑊𝑒𝑎𝑘𝑛𝑒𝑠𝑠𝑒𝑠:

Your greatest strength is the storylines, they are good but you need to try and improve on your weakness which is the non-descriptive writing style along with grammar.

Side note: Can I use one of your plots to make a book? It would be a pleasure.

SeokJins_Yeonin_rh

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