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-Reviewer Nana-

Book cover:: The cover of the book is really pretty, I like how it came out so beautiful and thrilling. Everything seems at its place and font color totally goes with it. Although, the subtitle could get some help since it was quite difficult for me to read it and the font size of the title can be reduced by a bit.

Title:: The name was one of the best parts of the book, it directly reflects on the plot and makes one interested to read it. I won't suggest any changes.

Description:: The description doesn't really seem that good due to some grammatical mistakes and syntax. I would suggest you cross-check it and change the sentence structure. Besides that, you could have written the last part as "An assassin who is well known but there is a reason behind her start. Aside from the assassin duty, her target is to assassinate the people who betrayed and murdered her parents ruthlessly years ago, Y/n...the assassin who crosses paths with the leader of Born Killer. What will happen?"

Storyline:: The plot is creative and the storyline is even more creative, I like how everything seemed planned and organized. The targets and meeting were exciting and the execution was great! A drawback though, the chapter names. They were quite interesting but the font used, makes it hard to read. I'll advise you to use a normal font.

Character:: The character description was pretty good but I still think you could add more to it. Also, when you start...I'll suggest you show a good amount of personal life so that the readers can connect more to the characters.

Dialogue delivery:: The dialogue delivery was just fine except for sometimes when only action was shown, even if it was obvious that the person was saying that. For example- "Look who's early today?" Hye-sonn slaps on her back, making her wince in pain.

Here you should have not included the question mark because, usually it's not said in a questioning manner but rather in a teasing way. Then, you should have stated that Hye-sonn said it whilst slapping her back rather than "on" which made her wince in pain.

-Reviewer Koo-

BOOK COVER[4/5]: The cover is really well-edited and it attracts the eye of a reader. Also, it depicts the theme pretty well.

TITLE[3/5]: The title is catchy, but something else could've been used to make it look even more intriguing. 'The Revenge' could have done a good job too, but no worries 'cause it suits the story.

DESCRIPTION[10/15]: The description is not too bad, but it could do with some improvements. Like for instance:

"Someone who is born to kill and slay people named as Born Killer. Their hands never tremble while taking someone's life." would be better if written as: "Someone who is born to kill and slay humans, is named The Born Killer. Their hands don't tremble when they take lives." I didn't change much, but just improvised the sentences.

"Y/N is an assassin, in the disguise of a normal citizen. Besides the assassination duty, her target is to assassinate the people who betrayed and murdered her parents ruthlessly years ago." this one would be better if written as: "Y/N, an assassin, disguised as a citizen with normal life, is given the duty of assassination. Besides the duty to kill, it's her aim to assassinate that one person who ruthlessly murdered her parents years ago."

Other parts were pretty much fine and a few grammatical errors were there. Please do go through it again to correct them.

STORY LINE[16/20]: The story line was pretty unique and was quite interesting. But there were some minor plot holes that made the story confusing. The story should be edited to remove those plot-holes.

CHARACTERS[8/10]: The characters were quite well-portrayed and the descriptions were not too delusional but the right way they should be.

DIALOGUE DELIVERY[12/15]: The dialogues were nice but not up to expectations.

You see, the dialogues show a little bit of the character's personality, so it's important to get them right and in a way that speaks about your character. Some of them sounded too basic and lame when compared to the situation.

GRAMMAR & VOCAB[15/20]: There were numerous grammatical errors. For instance: "how do you think she will let live after you people ruined her entire life." First of all, 'How' should be replaced with 'why' and in the phrase 'will let live', it doesn't makes a sense. You could've written it as, 'will let you live'. And you need not have added the word 'entire' in 'ruined her entire life.'

There are many more such mistakes and I would suggest copying the entire thing in Google Docs or Word so that the mistakes are pointed out and you can correct them.

TOTAL[68/100]

WEAKNESS AND STRENGTH:

Your strength to begin with is the imagination. I liked how you have described some scenes though it needs more improvement honestly speaking.

Your weakness that I felt is the English language. You could've used several other words to make the story pleasant and the grammar was also off at some places, as I mentioned before.

But you have done a fairly good job with the story so kudos for that!

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