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- Reviewer Semi -

Book cover :: 7/10

Title :: 4/10

Description :: 14/15 

Story line :: 13/20

Characters :: 8/10 

Dialogue delivery :: 13/15 

Grammar & Vocab :: 12/20  

Total :: 72/100 

 Strengths and weaknesses:: First of all, the cover was kind of boring (At least in my opinion.) I understand that you were trying to maintain the same style of covers for your books, but the cover didn't strongly attract me. Still, if someone was desperately trying to find a book, they might not be bothered about the cover. However, I suggest maybe increasing the size or making the subtitle more noticeable. Also, covering Jungkook's eyes isn't very suitable for the book plot.

 The title is also another main reason why the book doesn't interest me. Not only for me, but for most people too. "I need you" is a very common title. We can see many fanfics with that title. To interest someone, the book's title must be very interesting and should be able to make the readers curious about what the book might be like. For example, your book is giving the vibes of a love triangle. So, try some names that have the same meaning, but one that gives readers a strong urge to want to read. 

The book description is very detailed. It's one of the many strengths of your book. It's not cliche nor had too much information about the book. It's written perfectly. The storyline is very good and unique. Like always, there will be BTS x army, mafia, or high school. However, this storyline is different so it's very interesting. Characters are greatly created. All characters have an interesting backstory, making readers get even more attracted to the story. The characters weren't dumb or boring. So it's also a strength. Dialogue and delivery is also very good. I can understand it very clearly, without any confusion. That's also a strength.

Grammar and vocabulary is good as well. I didn't find a lot of grammar mistakes, and your vocabulary is not that bad. I saw that you wrote some words in short form, like we use when we chat. For example, you used apt for appropriate. You used ent. for entertainment. I suggest you write the full word rather than writing the short form of it, as it's more formal and appropriate. Even if this is a fanfiction, this is also a book. Have you seen any authors write in short form for their books? I hope you take it into consideration. There were a few times where you had spelled the words incorrectly. 
For example, " My mother got seriously i'll last year." 
"I'll" should be ill. 

I saw a few more, but I don't clearly remember them. If you reread after typing you'll be able to fix your mistakes. Well that's all I have to say. Your plot is great, grammar is good, dialogue is great, and the description is also good. You just need a good title, add a few re-touches to the cover, and correct those words. Then BAM, your book is a well written book. 

Yang_semi

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