Harry2411

- Reviewer Moon -

Cover :: 7/10
The cover is attractive and carries an aesthetic sense. The font of the main text was visible so was the sub-text, however, I believe it could be changed. It's too simple in my opinion. Other than that, the usage of filters was great along with the choice of the background. But I would suggest being a little more creative with it and adding special effects. Some realistic autumn leaves would be the perfect fit! Also, I really liked the banners you used in the story. If you make a cover like that, then it will just be perfect!

Title :: 2/5
The title was okay, I got that you wanted to add some aesthetic sense to the title but I still believe that it can be improved. You should add a bit of advanced vocabulary in the title. Also, try to use a title that resonates with the storyline. Try to remain inside the plot as the story was somehow sad and described the plot from the beginning to the end and did not just talk about a single month. So you should try to remain inside the plot.

Blurb :: 3/10
Your blurb was fairly good. You should use some lines that relate to the story and lines with the plot along with some dialogues. You should also try to make a blurb that gives hints to the storyline but doesn't give out the plot. Your story can have a perfect blurb if you look through into it, hence you should improve that.

Plots and Twists :: 14/25
The plot was somehow common. It was a typical story of one-sided love that we witness in everyday life. Your plot was somehow interesting at the same time as it communicates the imperfections of reality but at the same time, you should work on its execution. A plot is only successful if its execution is great, hence you should work on that. There were only a limited amount of plot twists, that I understand since it was a one-shot but you still need a massive amount of work put into plot execution.

Characters and Emotions :: 6/10
I could feel the emotions, but not that clearly. You need to describe them better with more feelings so that the readers are satisfied with it. The feeling of melancholy at the end should be more prominent. And also, you need to explain the emotions more explicitly, in instances like, when you mentioned Taehyung's sadness that was caused due to Y/N getting back together with Hoseok. You need to work on your emotions and describe them more in these places.

Writing Style :: 11/15
I really liked the banner that you used in the chapters. Your paragraphs length was uneven at times, you should keep them all with the same length. Along with that, you should also work on balancing the lengths of your chapters a little.

Grammar and Vocabulary :: 12/20
I observed many grammatical errors in the story, along with that, I also saw some punctuation errors, and Spelling mistakes. Your vocabulary needs to be improved as it affects the story on a large scale. Also, you should proofread the chapters before finally publishing them.
I found a couple of errors like 'classteacher' are actually two separate words i.e. class teacher. And then in another sentence, you mentioned 'I waters them everyday-' . Sweetie, your chapters need some editing. The actual sentence would be 'I water them everyday'. Along with these mistakes, I found some severe punctuation and grammatical errors that need to be edited. Here, I would suggest you edit the book or ask an editor to help you with it.

Reviewer's Thoughts :: 3/5
Your book is good, but needs to be improved to a great extent. You should improve the vocabulary, grammar, along with the description and writing style, so that it gets the recognition it deserves. You highlighted the actual aspects of life where there is always not a happy ending and that is appreciable. But at the same time, you should work on your plot execution and structure too.

Total :: 58/100

Strengths and Weaknesses ::
Your strengths include your graphics, along with your ideas. You can really get help from these in reviewing.
Your weaknesses include your grammar, along with your plot execution structure. You should improve both of them and edit the book all over.
Hope the review was helpful, with improvement I'm sure your writing would be very enjoyable for all readers!

moonmelody0109

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