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- Reviewer Amber -

Book cover :: 8/10

Title :: 3/10

Description :: 7/15

Story line :: 9/20

Characters :: 4/10

Dialogue delivery :: 7/15

Grammar & Vocab :: 14/20

Total :: 52/100

Weaknesses and strengths :: Starting off, the title isn't intriguing one bit. "My Kookie" wouldn't catch my eye or make me interested in the book! The description is confusing. That's the only way I can describe it. The story itself wasn't bad. While reading, I couldn't really decide if I loved it or hated it, just because there were plenty of times where I liked the way it was going, but there were also a lot of parts where I just cringed. The thing that I disliked the most were the characters. There was next to no mystery about the characters, nothing that wasn't at first told, so they were just like stickmen - plain and basic. Jungkook was portrayed as a big silly baby and Jihyun was labeled as "emotionless and cruel", yet never did I really notice those features. I'd say that her personality is a bit over-done. She keeps pointing out weird details (that doesn't show how the character is smart, she just notices details) and is considered way to smart for her age. The story line has potential, I think if the writer keeps writing, they should re-write the story in some time, through fresh eyes. The dialogue wasn't bad, but again, it made me cringe and stop reading more than a few times. There were grammar mistakes, quite a few actually. They did bother me. It's kind of weird that the writer says that the story has been checked by many people, but then it still has plenty of mistakes. The cover of the book is aesthetically pleasing, it's nice, pretty basic, but I still like the style of it. If I had to describe the book, I'd say that it's messy. I like where it was going, but I'm not sure if the author carried it out. The events unravel very quickly and the chapters are short-ish. As I said previously, I think if the author were to re-write the story after some time, it would feel like a whole different thing. If they keep on working and improving, I'm sure that they could turn it into a great book!

- Reviewer Minsha -

Title: 4/10

Book Cover: 5/10

Description: 10/15

Story Line: 12/20

Characters: 4/10

Dialogue Delivery: 7/15

Grammar & Vocab: 14/20

Total: 56/100

Weakness and strengths: First of all, the cover it wasn't really attractive to me, being honest it didn't attract me, I mean more filters are needed, then I would say it is fine for the story but not good enough to match the title. Then the title, "My Kookie", is not a good title for the story, well it didn't catch my attention though it may catch a few people who are Jungkook biased, their attention. The description I would say, is good ad it confuses you and I guess the genre in mystery so yeah, I guess that's how it should go, but the description of a mysterious story must always attract you and want you to know more, there's nothing like that in the blurb, it is stated that Jihyun is "emotionless and cruel" but it isn't like that, in a chapter it is mentioned by jihyun herself that the people only get to see the bright side and not the cold or dark one. So, I would suggest to look over the description everytime before making a next chapter or should keep a relevant description. Being a mysterious story lover, I obviously wanted to know more about the book so yes, I went in and honestly it wanted me to read more but sometimes I would see some lines really to out of the storyline, which i would say will distract the readers from the main storyline. I won't say I loved it nor did i hate it.

The characters I would say that the characters are weird ? I don't have a word to describe the characters but Jungkook is just a big silly baby. About Jihyun her personality is a bit too sarcastic which I kida disliked and kind of over done, her personality is kinda confusing and she keeps on noticing different and weird things which I would say do not prove anything at that time, but well if she is atleast trying to write a mystery story, I appreciate that, our mind should be too creative to write an amazing mystery story and everyone doesn't dare to do this, so I appreciate it. But, I would suggest to change the way that the characters are portrayed. Jin being a police officer didn't notice that jungkook's friend was poisoned and murdered and not dead in an accident so, that is fool of him. The dialogues are fine, I would say, but the way the dialogues are delivered should be changed, although mystery means to confuse you, but that doesn't mean it should confuse you in what a character is saying it should be clear. There are several grammar mistakes and the vocabulary is too less I would like it if she increase her vocabs and uses good words because that enhances stories not only mystery genre but every genre.

The final thing I got to say is, making characters personality understandable and not to make readers confused by giving two different explanations of personality. The grammar needs to be worked on and vocabulary needs to be increased. The dialogues needs to be worked on and the storyline, I would say is fine.

Overall, the whole story needs editing, the author should read it and edit it overall, if done properly it could be a masterpiece.

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