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𝙱𝚘𝚘𝚔 𝙲𝚘𝚟𝚎𝚛: 8:10

The cover is indeed eye catching. I think it corresponds with the storyline as well.

But however I feel the font for the word Unexplained is a bit unclear. I think if the text is aligned at a bit higher position it would be better. But nevertheless I think it's a very good cover.

𝚃𝚒𝚝𝚕𝚎: 9/10

The title was indeed unique. In my personal opinion I liked the title and it really made me curious to read the book. But a question is there hanging in my mind and I'll just leave it here without any comments. 'Was the title a bit too long for wattpad?'

𝙳𝚎𝚜𝚌𝚛𝚒𝚙𝚝𝚒𝚘𝚗: 12/15

I can see that you, have used a lot of effort of writing that description. But if the descriptions are too long and filled with unnecessary words and explanations, it will make the readers annoyed or mostly they won't read any further. I would like to suggest, adding more intriguing quotes of the story and less explanations. I think it's the only thing needed in that description.

𝚂𝚝𝚘𝚛𝚢𝚕𝚒𝚗𝚎: 17/20

I'm glad that it's not the typical cliche' mafia and the girl story. Even though Yoongi was a mafia I'd say your plot had a bit difference. Maybe it because the female lead is not that defenseless or a helpless, submissive girl or maybe even because of how you create the events and deliver them. However I want you to remember plot twists and changing up the normal morals of those stories in Wattpad and writing is the key for a unique plot. And unique plot is the key for gaining more readers because if your book hold a common plot they have seen already and have read they won't be interested in reading it again much.

𝙲𝚑𝚊𝚛𝚊𝚌𝚝𝚎𝚛𝚜: 9/10

In my personal opinion, I like the characters. I love how the female lead makes Yoongi speechless at times and how Yoongi makes her emotions a ruckus. The friend of female lead is somewhat an interesting character. The backstory of Yoongi is a bit common but I don't think it was that much of a problem.

𝙶𝚛𝚊𝚖𝚖𝚊𝚛 𝚊𝚗𝚍 𝚅𝚘𝚌𝚊𝚋𝚞𝚕𝚊𝚛𝚢: 17/20

Indeed on fancy words you use adds more points but I noticed that you haven't use capitals after double quotes and commas. For example,

"Well, let's deal with that when the time comes," you strutted and strutted towards the bathroom.

In here 'you strutted' should start with a capital Y. Another thing I noticed was that you have sometimes used unnecessary explanations in chapters and also words that doesn't match for the situation. The unnecessary explanation can get annoying sometimes so I think avoiding them would be better. Other than that, I think the grammar was pretty decent.

𝕋𝕠𝕥𝕒𝕝: 72/100

𝑆𝑡𝑟𝑒𝑛𝑔𝑡ℎ𝑠 𝑎𝑛𝑑 𝑊𝑒𝑎𝑘𝑛𝑒𝑠𝑠𝑒𝑠:

The strengths were the cover, title, characters. Weaknesses were the small errors in description, delivery. The story was going at a steady pace so I think it's a good strength too.

Well lastly I wish you the best of luck in continuing and finishing the book!

KeonMin_X

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