Reviewer : Yumi (anonymous)
Book title : Mariana Luanthes
Author: strickingshadow

Title: ⅗

As I would say it's not as eye-catching or creative but just the main character’s name.

Cover: ⅗

In terms of theme and genre, It does fit its genre and sets a certain mood/theme while going to book but not eye catching in terms of visual appeal but reflects the main character quite well.

Description / Prologue 3 /5

The tone is set quite nicely, giving off dark academia but fantasy aspects. Though in the beginning, I would say we lack a proper hook to compel readers to continue reading; as we begin with trauma dumping of the main character which could have been spread out through the chapters. As we get to learn the character, Luanthes, instead of getting it to us straight away.

First chapter: ⅘

Was executed well, as mentioned earlier lacks a proper hook to compel you to read more; it does develop as you continue the chapter with Luanthes and her father's dynamic is shown. I believe we were given a little too much trauma dumping in the first chapter where it could be spread out throughout the book.

Character Development 6/10

Until chapter 10, I wouldn't say there's any noticeable signs of character development as Mariana still stays the same as when we first met her in the first chapter. She doesn't have any specific events that lead her to change.

Plot 6/10

An interesting concept but has too many subplots to clearly define the main plot as new ideas are brought in. It's confusing to identify which is the main plot and which serves as a subplot. 

Writing Style: 12 /15

Very creative and unique, Though lacking certain punctuation and grammar and a few typos. A good vocabulary that could be built up with a few other words than the occasional ones repeated over and over. For example, repeating the word said after each character has spoken. Where you could use a variety of different words, to show they've spoken other than using said as it gets repetitive.

Dialogue: 8 /10

Very good, As it evokes emotion with what's being stated and the punctuation being used etc etc, though it's confusing which person is speaking as it's not clearly identified which could confuse readers.

Setting: 6/10

We go through a number of settings, From the Luanthes mansion, Mariana room, The academy etc etc

The settings, while well built, it feels like you're telling us rather than showing us, Though you use pictures to help build further imagery, more description in detail about the different settings would help better in the imagination.

Emotional Impact 6/10

In my opinion, I wouldn't say it has such an emotional Impact as it is built but not built enough to pull the heartstrings of readers.  

Reviewers Opinion: 10/15

A very interesting and used concept but spinned in your own unique way. I can clearly see the vision. The only problem is the execution in certain areas. Other than that some things I’d like to highlight are a one thing: pace

As we continue from chapter 1, The pace or how first the events of the book move or continue, seems to quicken as we're in one setting doing something particular while we're in the next with little explanation leading up to it. This seriously throws people off and leaves some of us confused as what's going on, An example would be Chapter 2-3 as were Introduced to the headmaster and her caretaker but are suddenly thrusts into another setting which hasn't been clearly identified or described where we have dragons being introduced and the Queen of dragons picking her. It's kind of confusing and going back to that part specifically and slowing the pace or giving a little more explanation would be better.

Total : 67/100

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