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Book:- The Crown

Author:- hogwartsjunior

Rev:- Seokie

|- ⑤ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʀᴇᴀᴅᴇʀ ɪɴᴛᴇʀᴀᴄᴛɪᴏɴ.

~ 5/5
Readers are impressed by the work you have put up in your book. When I was going through the comment sections in your book that time I got the feeling that you were able to connect your characters' emotions with the reader's emotions and that's worth praising.


|-  ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʙᴏᴏᴋ ᴄᴏᴠᴇʀ.

~ 5/10

Well, the cover was not that eye-catchy. I liked the efforts of making the cover 3d type but I did not like the colour combination. The unwanted stroke that crossed Namjoon's face was not at all appreciative. Even the quotes present on your cover are too small for the eyes, mind you if you are putting valuable quotes to create a better impression but the quotes are not clear for the readers that's the place where you can lose readers at first sight and so does marks at any awards. Moreover, I clearly remember that in your story Taehyung had silver lustrous hair but your cover shows he got rosy pink hair. And your book is about adventure so Callista and 7 other guardians have to go through bumpy roads to save the world before New-moon and it has no connection with butterflies and flower bed routes so I will suggest you to remove the butterflies from your cover.
Overall, I will suggest you go for a new cover for your book to attract more readers to your story.

|- ⑤ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʙᴏᴏᴋ ᴅᴇsᴄʀɪᴘᴛɪᴏɴ.

~ 3/5
According to me, I felt the description is the same as any other Supernatural story which deals with protectors of the World. Although the last part of the description was interesting and attention-catching because of the cliff hanger you have created at the end. But I will still suggest you change and use different atheistic fonts to create a unique blurb for your story.



|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʙᴏᴏᴋ ᴛɪᴛʟᴇ.

~3/10

There are tons of books out there in Wattpad with the same name as your so if you want your book to stand out of them then do think of a unique name for your story. I can suggest you a name 'εξουσία' ~ exousía it means power in Greek word, you can go for this type of name, it will help you to make your book title rare from other books.

|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʙᴏᴏᴋ ᴘʟᴏᴛ.

~ 7/10
The story was slow-paced at first which can make readers bore and make them skip few pages at the front but it was good from the place where the good old man started the tales of 'The Crown' but I felt that the death part of King and the part where Rosalind got killed was a little bit fast-paced maybe a detailed death could be good. I felt interested when Callista and Aubery met Jimin with flying tea. And how can we forget our deep-voiced almighty Taehyung who will be the next king of Koude. The story did depict the fearless stories of the brave Guardians but it still kept the touches of humour which is highly appreciated by me and I bet all the readers out there who read your amajin story.


|- ②⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ᴛʜᴇ ɢʀᴀᴍᴍᴀʀ ᴀɴᴅ ᴠᴏᴄᴀʙᴜʟᴀʀʏ.

~ 13/20
I did found some grammatical errors and typos in your book which you need to check to create a better impression for your reader. I have pointed out some of the mistakes from the story, I hope these will help to sort out the problems.

Here are some of the grammatical mistakes you have made:

1) "He then opened the book, with which began to narrate the story." you made a grammatical mistake here either remove the ' , ' or the 'with'.

2) He walked to you, and stared at you (Don't use a comma before 'and' it’s a grammatical error and never use ‘you' too much in a sentence it will not create a good impression for your reader instead write “He walked to you and stared intensely at your face”

3) "He does not even know where her mother is, or is she even alive or not" There is a fault in your pronouns instead of 'her mother' use 'his mother' as Jimin portrays a male character in this story and the black mind is speaking to Jimin here so you have to use 'his' instead of 'her'. And never use a comma before ‘or'.

4) "If you can’t trust yourself, don’t expect any other to do"  instead of using any other to do' use ‘anyone else to do it sounds better.

5) "We want to meet somewhere there" You made a typo which has changed the sentence and no proper meaning could be found so instead use ‘We want to meet someone there'

Well, The vocabulary used in your story is of good quality they have worked well to attract readers and create a better impression. After all, we can never underestimate the seductive power of a decent vocabulary.

|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs Fᴏʀ ᴘʟᴏᴛ ᴛᴡɪsᴛs ᴀɴᴅ ᴀᴛᴛʀᴀᴄᴛɪᴏɴ.

~ 7/10
I did not find the major plot twist in the story till now but I will not say that plot twist will not occur shortly as the story is still new. About attractions, yeah, the story did attract me I liked how the author has worked well with the time skips and cliff hangers to make the readers lure around the story for more.

- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ᴇᴍᴏᴛɪᴏɴs ᴀɴᴅ ᴄʜᴀʀᴀᴄᴛᴇʀ ᴅᴇᴠᴇʟᴏᴘᴍᴇɴᴛ.

~ 8/10
Even though the time spent with the character Merlene who was Callista's best friend was short according to the lines used in the book it shows Merlene and Callista has a strong bond which made me feel soft. Even the corrupted father of Jimin always forcing his ideas and viewpoint on Jimin made me go all Suga, I was even ready to fight that father of his cause one day I had also stood in his shoes. And the pains that Taehyung kept under his masked face also made me weak. Overall, the characters were impressive to me and I was able to connect with the emotions.

|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ᴄʀᴇᴀᴛɪᴠɪᴛʏ ᴀɴᴅ ᴡᴀʏ ᴏғ ᴡʀɪᴛɪɴɢ.

~ 8/10

The creativity of the words and the quotes at the front did impress me. I found the writing attractive as well except for the grammatical mistakes.

|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʏᴏᴜʀ ᴏᴘɪɴɪᴏɴ ᴏɴ ᴛʜᴇ ʙᴏᴏᴋ.

~6/10

Total Marks: 65/100


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The story was amajin piece of writing but for the cover, your story can lose readers at first sight so I suggest a change of cover. If you want your book to stand out among the other books in Wattpad then do go for a unique name. I have pointed out some grammatical errors which you need to fix to reach where you always wanted to reach as an author. And I have liked the way you have made the characters connected the emotions and creativity of the book. Cliff hangers kept me curious about the next chapters which are appreciative.
Overall, I am impressed by your work. Jhope you will do better in near future.
Keep Going Author-nim, Hou Are Doing Good!!!

"Hey Jimin, You Nice, Keep Going!!!"

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