Book: SCIAMACHY

Author: jjeonvrl

Reviewer: Suzy

No. of chapters: 15

Title: 5/10

Sciamachy: Fighting one's own shadows. All the main characters, i.e, Jungkook, Ayira and Jackson had their own trauma's and inner demons they were fighting with but the story gave spotlight mostly to Jackson's part, though the title is good and slightly apt.

Cover: 0/10

The bg pic is out of canvas and the title font color, size and placement needs a change. The whole cover is extremely messy and the book needs a whole new cover which fits the plot well, while making a cover make sure that It fits the wattpad cover size. The author name isn't updated and adding a subtitle would be alot better.

Description: 0.5/5

Just a dialogue? Tell your readers more about the book, tell them what they're signing up for when they come across your book, make it intriguing and longer. The description needs alot more than what It got now. 

Reader’s Interaction: 2 /5

The comments are less comparatively to the no. of reads, add a bit of humor and sarcasm in the dialogue.

Plot: 4 /10

As you mentioned in the beginning, it wasn't a cruel mafia meets the weak girl type of story but there can be many improvements made in the book, especially the epilogue, when you're ending a book without angst or with a heartfelt conversation between the main characters, 'as we both drifted off to sleep peacefully' isn't a satisfying ending, for me at least. The beginning was amazing and unpredictable but the epilogue was just not it, Maybe because of the ending scene which was of them going to sleep? Don't you think having a different situation or scene would be better to end it off? Maybe they could be in the hospital, standing beside Jackson who was in coma or if positive then maybe their garden? Maybe at a beach or on the rooftop watching the sun set? I'm not telling you to make it romantic but I'd suggest you choose a place which would symbolize and fit the ending scene well. And was Jackson actually in coma or I got it wrong? 

Grammar: 15/20

Few of your sentences or dialogues, though written right, sound off and complex, try to simplify your dialogues a bit. 

Ch.2

'I didn't know how I had still been alive even after not having had a wink of sleep…….....'

Typos: There weren't many typo's but it's always good to have them proofread, for example this one typo I discovered while reading your book,

Ch 12.

'rope binding my hands was no itchy……'

isn't it supposed to be now or am I again getting it wrong?

Plot twists and attraction: 3 /10

Jackson who supposedly only wanted to make the boys work for him suddenly gets interested in the female lead? Jackson being Ayira's brother was quite predictable.

Emotions and character development: 2/10 

Ayira was described as the girl who cannot trust anyone easily yet she fell in love with Jungkook earlier than I expected and Jungkook's guilt suddenly turns into love, all this was just not described the way it was supposed to be. Although you're amazing at writing, you did fail in this part. You didn't showcase or describe their love properly, a few more moments and descriptions about their feelings towards each other would make the book better. 

Creativity and way of writing: 4/10 

I really liked your choice of words and writing style, you just need to work a little more on the pacing because the book was rushed, it could've been more detailed and descriptive. 

Your opinion on the book: 5/10

Total Marks: 40.5 /100