Book: Mr.Right, My ass | KSJ

Author: worldwidecutieee_

Reviewer: Rihana

• TOTAL MARKS- ①⓪⓪

|- ⑤ Mᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ғᴏʟʟᴏᴡɪɴɢ ᴛʜᴇ ʀᴜʟᴇs.
-5/5

|- ⑤ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʀᴇᴀᴅᴇʀ ɪɴᴛᴇʀᴀᴄᴛɪᴏɴ
-3/5                                                                                                                                                           
Since it’s a new book, not bad at all. The paragraphs are so good and humorous- even I ended up commenting hehe. 

|- ⑤ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʙᴏᴏᴋ ᴄᴏᴠᴇʀ.
-4/5                                                                                                                                          
It’s elegant, classy and catchy, but the subtext in the cover is not really visible so there goes the 1 mark.

|- ⑤ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʙᴏᴏᴋ ᴅᴇsᴄʀɪᴘᴛɪᴏɴ.
-4/5                                                                                                                                                             
Even though it might be a little confusing, the description makes the reader curious to find out what the book is about.

|- 10 ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʙᴏᴏᴋ ᴛɪᴛʟᴇ.
-10/10                                                                                                                                     
I personally loved it, it’s very sassy and different.

|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʙᴏᴏᴋ ᴘʟᴏᴛ.
-10/10                                                                                                                                
The plot is very interesting. I’ve never read a book with a similar plot so I was glued to the book till the end .

|- ②⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ᴛʜᴇ ɢʀᴀᴍᴍᴀʀ ᴀɴᴅ ᴠᴏᴄᴀʙᴜʟᴀʀʏ.
-10/20                                                                                                                                                           
Firstly, your vocabulary is pretty good as I could see a lot of new words in your book.                                                                                                                                
Secondly, I noticed you’re pretty confused about the usage of tenses while writing a paragraph. Your grammar was kinda messed up due to this.                               
Here’s an example, “I was a crying mess at the middle of a rainy midnight, until I felt a warm cloth hug my cold and wet back. A person with a deep and intimidating voice spoke as he caresses my back.”                                                                            
In this sentence, ‘I was a crying mess’ is in the past tense and ‘as he caresses my back’ is in the present tense.                                                                                                              
This is wrong because the verbs in this sentence don’t use the same tense and the reader tends to get confused if you switch the tense of narrative so frequently in the same sentence.
The correct sentence here would be- “I was a crying mess at the middle of a rainy midnight, until I felt a warm cloth hug my cold and wet back. A person with a deep and intimidating voice spoke as he caressed my back.”
This was how most of the sentences were, as it’s not possible to correct all of them now, I hope this helps you and you’ll correct this mistake the next time you write.

|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs Fᴏʀ ᴘʟᴏᴛ ᴛᴡɪsᴛs ᴀɴᴅ ᴀᴛᴛʀᴀᴄᴛɪᴏɴ.
-10/10                                                                                                                                    
I did not see any plot twists yet but that doesn’t make the story boring at all. You ended every chapter with a cliffhanger, so it interests the reader to read more. I found myself wanting to read the next chapter asap!

|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ᴇᴍᴏᴛɪᴏɴs ᴀɴᴅ ᴄʜᴀʀᴀᴄᴛᴇʀ ᴅᴇᴠᴇʟᴏᴘᴍᴇɴᴛ.
-9/10                                                                                                                                                                  
Oh my, I loved how badass your characters were. There was everything in your story- sassiness, savageness, lots and lots of humour, a little bit of heartbreak(I’m sure more’s coming haha) and a bit of everything else. I felt like you could describe the emotions in a better way though!

|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ᴄʀᴇᴀᴛɪᴠɪᴛʏ ᴀɴᴅ ᴡᴀʏ ᴏғ ᴡʀɪᴛɪɴɢ
-8/10                                                                                                                                                                                   
Your writing is very creative and you don’t lack in creativity at all, although I felt you could improve the way you write.
 
|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʏᴏᴜʀ ᴏᴘɪɴɪᴏɴ ᴏɴ ᴛʜᴇ ʙᴏᴏᴋ.
-9/10
  TOTAL MARKS: 82/100
YOUR REVIEW: Honestly, I loved your plot and the way you portray your characters! If you pay some attention to the grammatical mistakes and proofread your story once to correct some typos, it’d be perfect. You have a potential to be a great author, you just have to improve a little! After all, life is all about learning new things and improving yourself!                                                  
I enjoyed reading your book so much, I’m waiting for new updates<3