Reviewer: Rabi

Book: Amorous

Author: HotChocoChipCookie

Last updated: August 9, 2021

Cover: ⅕

I don't see any effort being pulled into this. It's just a simple picture with text on it. However, the vibes match with the title you choose. But about the attractiveness, I am sorry to say but this cover is not catchy enough to grab reader's attention. I would suggest you use a graphic shop for this purpose. According to the theme and the title, you should use dark themes with color schemes which are used to show the want and desire as red wine or reddish brown.

Title: ⅖

The reason you choose it and why the book is named as "Amorous" was unknown to me, but I came to know about it after searching for its meaning. Now I know the meaning and getting vibes as to what might be the relation of the title is with the story, there is still a lot to be unveiled to get into more depths. This story has less than 8 updates regarding the story. So I am still unsure of the purpose of choosing this title. 

Synopsis: ⅘

It left me in awe, truth to be said. The little paragraph you wrote at the end showing the true process of love (I would like to call it one), left me speechless. I don't know about others but I am sure, it made me interested in knowing more and personally think it will catch others attention as well. 

Execution:  6/10

The way you wrote a few lines and events made me feel good. It left a good impression on me. You described the events well and portrayed the scene well. The marks I cut are the reason, I felt the pace was too slow sometimes. Sometimes, I felt too odd and too slow in the procedure. The pace was uneven. This story still has a lot to unwrap and I can't say anything further than feeling what was felt though those 7 chapters. 

Plot: 6/20

As I have said earlier, your story doesn't even have 10 chapters. Therefore I don't see any special happening or events taking place here. Sure, it has a great start and going good but still, I can't say anything related to the story plot and storyline. Whether it has any match with title, with blurb or it has any elementary techniques making it cliche or unique. The last update was on 9th August. I would suggest you to upload frequently in order to gain readers and let the others know about the masterpiece it will turn out in. 

Writing style: 14/20

As much as I have read your book, I am impressed with your writing skills. You are good with words and explanations of events. The only problem you seem to have is the pace. Sometimes, it gets excessive over a scene to tell the readers that might make them lose their interest. It is not bad to create a graphic description of the scene and thus ability is rarely seen. People Alla enjoy it but get bored after then you expect. 

Hope you can work it off to a better condition. You can keep up the pace you want, but you can change it a bit. Try to add more dialogues and events rather than staying in the narrative mode. I am sure it will help you. 

Grammar: 18/20

I don't have any objection regarding this factor. You seem pretty good with grammar and punctuations. I don't seem to find any mistake which can lead me into cutting the marks. Good job done here. 

Character development: 1/10

Truth to be said, the characters are barely even introduced yet. I have talked about the updating schedule before as well. You Need to update more frequently to let us know about the story plot and characters. Studying the characters you portrayed in the book till now has given me a bit of hints to their personalities but I am not sure about the future. 

Total: 52/100