REVIEW

Book Name: 5 Centimeters per Second

Author:  Eulissah

Reviewer: Lals ( @Taebaetae74 )

Rules Followed: 05/05

Thank you for following all the rules, love!

Cover: 01/05

The cover wasn’t really attractive. It was very clumsy. The font needs a change and the subtitle used needs better placement. They’re almost not visible. Yoongi looks like he’s floating and the contrast is too much. The cherry blossoms where all over the place. Also, based off just the title, the subtitles need a change. It really doesn’t make sense on a cover. 

Title: 02/05

Now I know that you took ‘inspiration’ for a Japanese film series. But the least you could do was at least change the title. It was related to the book, yes; but, it wasn’t based off what the book revolves around. I suggest you pick out a title more apt for the book.

Synopsis: 03/10

The synopsis wasn’t really entrancing, you know? It did not make me wanna read more of the book. It felt more like I was reading lecture notes. Straight to the point with no way around words. The blurb’s structure as a whole was not very . . . pleasant. The first two lines of the descriptions should’ve been in quotes. Otherwise, it would make it look like you were saying that to your reader. The book didn’t really tell me anything about the book- just about the situation in which their characters were in.  It would be better if you could add in some more content. Don’t reveal too much, but reveal enough. To the point where it makes readers curious as to what the book holds.

Execution: 04/10

Like the synopsis, the chapters’ execution in terms of typing was clumsy. The first couple of words were in bold and underlined with right alignment whereas the rest of the chapter was aligned centrally in italics. There could’ve been a way to make it appear a tad bit tidier. 

If I’m looking at the execution plot-wise, it wasn’t so good either. First off, you write extremely short chapters. On top of that provide irrelevant information. So yes, it was a bit off.

Plot: 05/20

First off, you had taken inspiration from a film. So the least you could’ve done was add in more scenarios of your own. There were little to nothing of your own scenes in the book. I mean, yes you gave credits- but this is not ‘taking inspiration’. 

Apart from that, like I already mentioned above, the execution of plot was off. Books with insanely short chapters are meant to build up slowly. And even so, you got to have a good vocabulary and decent writing. I could see none of that in the book.

Writing Style: 05/20

First off, you need to provide more details. There’s nothing wrong with writing short chapters; but when you do that, make sure to provide only necessary information. I also felt that many a times, you failed to construct sentences properly. Cut down on the unnecessary words in sentences. Merge them if possible. The writing style as of now is very mundane. 

Grammar & Vocabulary: 13/20

 You have lots of room for improvement here. At many points, you skipped certain words you were to use. For instance, in the first chapter, instead of ‘but worth’, you could’ve said ‘but it was worth it’. I also feel that you need to expand your vocabulary a lot more. 

As for the grammar, you leave out on using the apostrophe in ‘it’s’ (only when it’s ‘it is’). You also add commas in unnecessary places. For instance, in the sentence, ‘Other would ask, if we were to marry each other when we grew up.’ The comma there was completely there. And ‘going to’ would do better than ‘were to’. The both of the terms mean different things.

Characters & Development: 06/10

They were good. But the perspectives were confusing. Rather than ‘me’ and ‘you’, you could’ve just written in third person POV. It was really confusing. 

Emotions Conveyed: 01/05

Like I already mentioned above, you describe very little. So no. I couldn’t catch on the emotions you were trying to convey.

Total: 45/100

Final Note: To start off, please do not be discouraged. I do not mean to convey any offense through this review. I am simply trying to help you here. if you edit out your errors & improvise more, you’ll be there. Don’t hesitate to hit me up if you have any queries regarding this review ☺ My DMs are open for ya <3