I hope you're all having a wonderful day! Today, my review is of a romance novel named "Phosphenes"  by Shivarns ! Let me know your thoughts!

Cover:

The darkness on it creates a great contrast with the brightness of the title's cover.The contrast of love's nature feels well represented through this which I have to recognise.

I also like that there is an embodiment of the character who according to the blurb, is clearly an important person to the novel. It would've been nice if the girl was represented in some way though, since she is also an essential character.

Blurb:

The blurb reveals important aspects of the story but not so much that rousing questions are immediately stifled with obvious answers. It mentions an impactful incident which makes one wonder the aftermath on Amara, the survivor and how it is going to affect the story's plot. Jaden's initial purpose is also made aware to the reader.

I was also curious as to how everything will turn out eventually because it already seems like they're both going to get more than they bargained for and that made me want to read further.

Plot:

Each chapter seems to elaborate on Amare's character and what she has been through. Your vivid narration and dialogue introduces one to other characters and their roles and relationships with Amare.

I like your use of the element of surprise at such an early part of the novel. The fact that Amare was engaged honestly threw me off guard. I now wanted to know how that would affect her and Jaden along the way.

Characters:

Can I just say how much I love Aiden and his hilarious, creepy self so far? The secrecy surrounding Amare's traumatic experience makes her a really interesting character. So far, all the other characters seems like good people who'll look out for Amare. I really can't ignore your subtle way of introducing Jaden. One doesn't know it's him by name but one knows it's him. Great job on that!

Grammar:

There are some typographical and grammatical errors. I think that they can easily be amended with a little editing though.

I noticed that at a point you used "orbs" in place of eyes. Even though it's your decision, I really hope it's not going to be a recurring word. Ironically, on wattpad, "orbs" is used more often than "eyes" in countless stories. I'm pretty sure most readers would appreciate the use of the classic word "eyes" or an uncommonly creative yet simple alternative.

This would drive away any form of clichés from your novel.

Generally:

Since "Phosphenes"  has only a few chapters so far, I can't really give a general overview but I do like where it's going. Be mindful of some of these petty mistakes and keep up the good work!

Thanks so much for requesting.

Do check out "Phosphenes" by Shivarns guys!

Have a wonderful day and I'm going to work on the other requests as soon as I can! Thank you for your support 😊.